Love

Member since 2003 · Posted 19 May 2003 · 12 comments

Love is like a piece of gold Hard to find, harder to hold Of all the guys I've ever met Your the one I cant forget I do believe the lord above Created you for me to love I once had a heart pure and true But now it's gone from me to you So take care of it as I have done For you have two now and I have none And if I get to heaven and your not there I'll wait for you by a golden stair If your not there by judgement day I'll know you've gone the other way So I'll trade my halo and my wings And all my other beautiful things Just to prove my love is true I'll go to hell and back for you.

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[0] Mona Lisa 20-May-03/11:32 AM Reply

reading this made me feel like I've eaten to many sweets. Far too immature and full of cliches, sorry its pants.

[n/a] deleted user › Mona Lisa 20-May-03/12:42 PM Reply

I agree - and I've read some of these lines before...more than once.

[n/a] Shardik 20-May-03/3:30 PM Reply

Do.

[6] Felzpoet 25-May-03/5:39 PM Reply

Isnt a sonnet supposed to rhyme every other line

[n/a] JackCrawley › Felzpoet 25-May-03/7:16 PM Reply

There are three traditional styles of sonnet: English, or Shakespearean; Italian, or Petrarchan; and Russian, or Onegin. The distinguishing feature of each is the rhyme scheme.

English: ABAB CDCD EFEF GG
Italian: ABBA ABBA CDECDE (sometimes CDEEDC)
Russian: ABAB CCDD EFFEGG

Note that these are all fourteen-line poems, while "Love" has eighteen. It doesn't come anywhere close to being a sonnet, of any kind.

[n/a] JackCrawley › JackCrawley 25-May-03/7:18 PM Reply

It should also be noted that, even when viewed as a non-sonnet, this poem is absolutely wretched.

[n/a] horus8 › Felzpoet 26-May-03/12:11 PM Reply

Like your face?

[3] Kitch 12-Jun-03/2:25 AM Reply

Utter Bollocks

[n/a] teenpoetryshoulddie 24-Jun-03/8:45 PM Reply

"Love is like a piece of gold
Hard to find, harder to hold"

What?! You can find gold at Wal-Mart! And it's really not that hard to hold, you just put it on your finger! Don't just write it because it rhymes, it sounds so...6th grade English class.

[10] poemwanker 27-Jun-03/4:15 PM Reply

I want to say that all of you are tits. The poem sucks too.

[1] bondjedi 14-Jul-03/11:38 AM Reply

From the Ma Joad tradition of poetry. The cliches, similarity to your other poems, misuse of "your", and reluctance to respect God by capitalizing his name add up to a big honking 1.

[1] StuntHornist 21-Jul-03/8:42 PM Reply

This is like a creepy cross between a girl scout song and that kid's prayer, as in, "Love is something if you give it away," and "When I lay me down to sleep." In conclusion, you suck, you die, 1.