| Re: Dumbfounded, dumbfucked by Bane |
26-Apr-03/1:49 PM |
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you've got potential. keep going
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26-Apr-03/1:54 PM |
how dare anyone even think of giving this piece of crap an eight
get over your bitching and your moaning...try coming up with a more creative way to express it.
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| Re: Pine by andrewjthomas |
29-Apr-03/5:43 PM |
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this has a lot of potential but i expected much more from the last stanza
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30-May-03/12:59 PM |
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it started out well, but i kind of lost interest at the end....maybe it was because the rhyming started to go bad
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30-May-03/1:02 PM |
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this is better suited for a lyric
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| Re: Lonely Soul by sir_heff |
30-May-03/1:04 PM |
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why are you daring me to call you a fake
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| Re: There is no Happy Hour in Bakersfield, Ca. by horus8 |
31-May-03/6:44 PM |
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not one of my favourites of yours, but it got better towards the end. still better than 7/8 of anything put up on this site.
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| Re: Plucking hearts and banjo by horus8 |
1-Jun-03/4:34 PM |
therefore you own up to nothing?
yeah, i bet you don't.
how chillingly creepy.
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| Re: "Your shrimp cocktail", wide ass. by Bachus |
3-Jun-03/8:52 PM |
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meh. myabe it's because i don't really like haikus much
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| Re: Break Dancing Charlie by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
3-Jun-03/8:55 PM |
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the last satnza is my favourite. as it should be.
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| Re: The Truth of Death by Schizophrenic |
6-Jun-03/3:50 PM |
what is the point of this poem?? the truth of death is that she lived slightly before she dies?
i see no purpose in this....degradation of poetry.
also, "ultra-sharp" does not do it for me as an, ahem, adjective.
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20-Jun-03/3:11 PM |
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whatever happend to 12 year old girls trying to be walt whitman
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| Re: I'll Just Have a Salad by jessicazee |
20-Jun-03/3:19 PM |
you know you're in trouble when a decent poem contains the word "yam" in it, not meant as a vegetable.
sufficient.
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| Re: and love, an envy by richa |
20-Jun-03/3:28 PM |
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| Re: Clay Man by eliastemplar |
1-Aug-03/7:24 PM |
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1-Aug-03/7:34 PM |
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very nice. i'm trying to decide if i like the abrupt ending or not
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1-Aug-03/7:40 PM |
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last line is great but "drive through drive thrus" is weak
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19-Aug-03/6:00 PM |
isn't the road the oldest lonely writers standard?
this poem is a slipknot, i think. just when it seems that nothings working out somebody yanks the ends and everything smooths out.
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19-Aug-03/6:09 PM |
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| Re: A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer |
21-Aug-03/7:03 PM |
i felt like i was reading a story when i read this, i'm not sure if that's good or bad.
not big on the way it begins. it seems too jumpy and not in the good way.
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