Re: 9/2/2003 by cpill	30-Jun-03/8:38 PM
Actually Not true at all. Plenty to see her. I like. I'm looking forward to more. -8-
Re: I Wonder by EmicaX	30-Jun-03/5:41 PM
A good first poem for the Ranker C. but be fair warned that if they are all like this You are gonna get Flamed big time. Later Daze C. Later Daze. -8-
Re: a comment on -=Words_From_Dark_Angel=- by wEdible Underpantsw	30-Jun-03/2:42 PM
Well I'm not dead but I am pretty tired so I think this'll be my last post for today. I'm going to go snuggle up to my teddy bear and catch some ZZZZZZZZZzzzzzzzzzzzzzz's.
Re: a comment on Standing by the Sea by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/2:41 PM
Note pad is nice but it lacks so many of the finer features of word such as spell check and the ablity to save in other fonts.
Re: a comment on Something You'll never understand by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/2:38 PM
Notice that none of this makes anysense what so ever when put together? Well a few lines work out. Its very sing song, and silly isn't it. Nope. Well, Yes and No. This is the way my mind works. The huge gaps are thoughts that whiz by so fast I have no clue what they are. My mind is Puzzled and My life is trying to quickly grab enough pieces to make some form of sense. Thats why my when I type things out I often leave out entire concepts that I wanted to write about and I'll make reference to them but they won't be there. That makes me look like a moron.
Re: a comment on The Outcry by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/2:30 PM
Too much New Nofx, Styx, Pennywise, and watching The Ring in one weekend. Thats all this poem is about really.
Re: a comment on My Nieghborhood(2) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/2:27 PM
Other than that its crap.
Re: a comment on My Nieghborhood(2) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/2:27 PM
Yeah went with a deeper meaning here that I actually remember. It is that people are more than they appear to be, Appearances are decieving, and sometimes people with just one thing in common with one another can help each other survive.
Re: a comment on My nieghborhood(1) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/2:24 PM
Its very off tempo but what can I say I was inspired by reading the canterbary tales again. I love Chaucer. So I thought I'd borrow some of his style. Its a great Idea but Other than the first and third verse I can't really picture it right in my head. Its not how I want it but its close. Grrr....
Re: a comment on This makes no sense by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/2:19 PM
This isn't about being a pediofile, Its about realising that bridge between teenage boyhood, and manhood, and wanting to be able to do the things you could do if you were on the otherside of the age line.
Re: a comment on Dumb Ideas by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/2:07 PM
Yeah Thats what I get for letting the guys talk me into writing songs when I'm drunk.
Re: a comment on Standing by the Sea by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/2:04 PM
I wrote it in word, which gave me a wider layout. It should look something like this Sing Sing of Sing of Nothing Dance Dance To Dance to the Sound *example ends* True I'll rename it. The humor was in the simple spurt of common sense at the end. Its done in a format I call Steps but I'm sure it has a better name. I tired to leave out most emotion yet still be appealing, but with the difference in word processors, Its lost its steps and without them is much more confusing.
Re: a comment on -=Words_From_Dark_Angel=- by wEdible Underpantsw	30-Jun-03/1:54 PM
Where I commenting to you I would have replyed to your previous comment(Just like you did to mine), instead of writing in the above comment box, a whole new comment that its rather unlikely U'd see.
Re: -=Words_From_Dark_Angel=- by wEdible Underpantsw	30-Jun-03/12:48 PM
You are such a Tard. I think you are D.A. And shouldn't it be feces?
Re: a comment on Ack Bassward, or something like that by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/12:42 PM
Tales such as love, heartache, corruption, and most every other idea ever thought up are as old as man. It is only thru variation of the tale that they have survived and managed to progress on further despite being as old as we are.
Re: a comment on A song I wrote for kristie played backwards by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/10:47 AM
The song is based loosely off of my Vilanelle called 'For Kristen'. It works better as a lyric but It took me too long to get it into Vilanelle format and I don't want to write another one cause those are defiantly a difficult style to write in.
Re: a comment on Sage by DreamerSupreme	30-Jun-03/10:37 AM
Emotional depth. Connecting with your reader on some level emotionally so that they want to read on(or in some cases don't). It can be used wake your reader up from a state of complete apathy and boredom. Angry Poems when written correctly tend to have the most force for a response from the storage house of chemicals we call our brains(for a good one that was mostly negative feedback check out my 'Mom And Dad' or 'Bad Mood', both were a little to angst driven but anger almost drips from them). Love Poems(which are for the most part boring and so mindnumbingly the same that they don't tend to work for the desired effect unless the reader is in the right mood) can be good but Overall Humorish poems work the best. I liked your Yoda poem because it was Humorish. Humor no matter how angry, or upset, or whatever emotional state we are in tend to be able to lighten our moods. There is nothing wrong with a Mystical poem but most of the good ones I've read tend to be shorter and ask simple questions with complex answers that provoke more complex questions. Yours while thought provoking ask in themselves multiple questions, and/or tend to be too discursive. Stick with one subject(please not religion or religious teaching I beg you) and focus on that without over doing it. Yeah descrition is a HUGE plus, but there is a point when your going too far and it subtracts from your meaning. philosophical/metaphysical thought (which is to religion to alot of people i.e. Buddist) doesn't have to be emotionless. Remember, Wonder is an emotional state too, and that is what you should be trying to get to. Might be a good Idea not to use words giving a sense of yourself pondering the questions you are possing. Such as "into MY unconquered mind". Just a tip, no offense but it adds redundancy to something that shouldn't have any. I hope that was of some helpful value cause if not, I can't really explain emotional depth any better. Its just a connection. Connections tend to keep things interesting because if done right they make what your saying have a life of its own that begs to run its course, and hopefully come to a nice tidy end.
Re: Sage by DreamerSupreme	30-Jun-03/7:38 AM
Still flailing, a nice attempt but so cold. No emotional depth to give it some feeling. Feels like its written by a machine. Even though its not it reads quite banal. -4-
Re: Blind Walk Into Poem Ranker by DreamerSupreme	30-Jun-03/7:21 AM
Don't feel bad. I ate yoda's dorito's and he got really postal. Welcome to the Ranker Dreamer. Beware the many names of Horus8. One of the best writers(I feel he's as good as D.A. but lacks the proper Malice in order to defeat our winged one) and a damn good musician. He's good on not being harsher than you deserve, and fucking brilliant. I'm giving this an -8- cause its funny and happens to alot of newbies here. Welcome to the club.
Re: a comment on A song I wrote for kristie played backwards by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Jun-03/7:08 AM
Um.. Uh.. I think the title explains its self. I didn't write it, More the way I sing a song I wrote for my girlfriend played in reverse wrote it, and I thought I'd share. I see it as trash but Its so funny to listen to, considering that this is one of those banal love songs that whiny teenage boys write, with simple words proclaiming I love her(take a moment to say ah.. how sweet and move on) and having it turn out like this? Played backwards my trivial love song becomes a song about a father scolding his son, for being a waste. Come on surely the humor in the ironing of this isn't lost apon you?