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11-Jun-03/10:32 PM |
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| Re: The Girl for Me by DeadtotheWorld |
11-Jun-03/10:36 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
12-Jun-03/11:54 AM |
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So I suggest you keep that in mind next time you decide to randomly drop 0's on good poetry my friend. I will systematically go through your poetry and unleash, do you catch my drift fucknose?
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13-Jun-03/2:28 PM |
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Yes, but as a reader, tell me, why should I give a shit? Once you've figured that out you'll also discover what's wrong with this haiku.
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| Re: Dirge by Nicholas Jones |
13-Jun-03/2:30 PM |
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I would totally lose the last line, and end at found.
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| Re: To Lesley by Bahookie |
19-Jun-03/3:37 PM |
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| Re: Nonentities by scitz |
19-Jun-03/4:08 PM |
See, unfortunately the first line's still over by one, not that I give a pazow, but there are those that, well, you know.
so try saying "Love's idiom" in the posessive.
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19-Jun-03/4:11 PM |
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| Re: Glass by Shar |
21-Jun-03/6:23 AM |
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| Re: sink by daniella |
21-Jun-03/6:24 AM |
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| Re: Breaking Breath by daniella |
21-Jun-03/6:25 AM |
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| Re: where once by daniella |
21-Jun-03/6:27 AM |
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| Re: One Love by crwncka1 |
21-Jun-03/6:30 AM |
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| Re: White Candle by crwncka1 |
21-Jun-03/6:31 AM |
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| Re: One road by crwncka1 |
21-Jun-03/6:33 AM |
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| Re: Small Place by crwncka1 |
21-Jun-03/6:50 AM |
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Well, at least your poetry maintains a theme. All be it that theme is a shit soda with no straw or lid, more power to you for doing it, but geezads your grasp of the art form is handless, poetry should be an internally delivered representitive of something almost unvoiceable, a reversable 3d puzzle from way deep within the subconcious. Allowing you to learn more about yourself and the world around you. What you've done here is just fallen in love and gone pure stupid, but in your pheremonic stupor you are oblivious and are of the opinion that because your love is so terrific and new and special, than so must be your poetry about it. Unfortunately, this is a temporary reaction to a temporary disease that will bring your defenses down setting you up to be viciously pummeled and tortured by the rack of longing, coupled by fear, and the human instinct to reproduce. I would prepare for stifling inevitable jealousy and horrifficaly depressing loss. Have fun.
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| Re: MotherF*ckers Who Fuck Above/Two Story Apartment by JoyLuck |
25-Jun-03/10:53 PM |
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An achievement of the highest order, but I thought you'd at least have a cactus or a cat Settle.
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| Re: Twennotmety by Brian Tiensvold |
25-Jun-03/11:01 PM |
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I believe it's spelled "while" young man. Carry on.
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| Re: Life's sad song by Brian Tiensvold |
25-Jun-03/11:05 PM |
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"Giving me reson to be." Dude, totally, last week my bong did the same.
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| Re: Life's sad song by Brian Tiensvold |
25-Jun-03/11:06 PM |
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"now... it donsn't seem to work at all" Is Don not feeling well?
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