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MotherF*ckers Who Fuck Above/Two Story Apartment

by JoyLuck

Member since 2003 · Posted 25 Jun 2003 · Edited 25 Jun 2003 · 45 comments

JL ROOFROOFROOFROOFROO ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFR ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROO ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFR ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROO ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFR ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROO ceilingceilingceilingceilingcei w f w a fanfan a l l l l w ddd w a (whiteboy) ooo a l (asianwhore) ooo l l BEDBEDBED rrr l floorfloorfloorfloorfloorfloorf ceilingceilingceilingceilingcei w w a a l we win l l ed dow l w wee w a d a l (alone) l l BEDBEDBEDBED l floorfloorfloorfloorfloorfloorf

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[10] Jeremi B. Handrinos 25-Jun-03/10:53 PM Reply
An achievement of the highest order, but I thought you'd at least have a cactus or a cat Settle.
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer › Jeremi B. Handrinos 26-Jun-03/12:35 AM Reply
Or maybe even a door to your apt.
[n/a] JoyLuck › OneFingerAnswer 26-Jun-03/12:51 AM Reply
pot head sneaks out of the window....

no the door is against a wall so it is unviewable

but a cactus would be nice
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer › JoyLuck 26-Jun-03/12:57 AM Reply
I gotcha on the door thing. I prefer palms to cacti. No, that's not a masterbation reference.
[n/a] Stephen Robins › Jeremi B. Handrinos 4-Jul-03/4:01 PM Reply
wanker.
[10] Brian Tiensvold 25-Jun-03/11:14 PM Reply
heh, cool.
[10] god'swife 26-Jun-03/10:17 AM Reply
You are briliant, dealing out these dada postcards. I truly love them.
[10] nugit15 26-Jun-03/1:38 PM Reply
MUHAHA...perfect
[n/a] deleted user 30-Jun-03/1:48 PM Reply
How can you call this poetry? Other is right. There is no category for this garbage. I mean really, you don't say anything and it is offending.
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 30-Jun-03/2:05 PM Reply
first of all
how does this garbage offend you?
[n/a] horus8 › JoyLuck 30-Jun-03/2:27 PM Reply
ROOFROOFROOFROOFROO
ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFR
ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROO
ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFR
ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROO
ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFR
ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROO
ceilingceilingceilingceilingcei
w f w
a fanfan a
l l
l l
w ddd w
a (whiteboy) ooo a
l (asianwhore) ooo l
l BEDBEDBED rrr l
floorfloorfloorfloorfloorfloorf
ceilingceilingceilingceilingcei
w w
a a
l we win l
l ed dow l
w wee s d
a d u o
l (alone) cat o
l BEDBEDBEDBED c r
floorfloortrapfloorfloorfloored
[n/a] horus8 › horus8 30-Jun-03/2:28 PM Reply
EARTHQUAKE
[n/a] JoyLuck › horus8 30-Jun-03/2:38 PM Reply
hahah i was starring at that and i was like
wtf is that???
then i saw EARTHQUAKE and i fell out of my chair laughing
[n/a] horus8 › horus8 30-Jun-03/2:30 PM Reply
JEFF GOLDBLOOM TELEPORTING IN A NEW MOVIE CALLED "THE FLY PART FOUR".
[n/a] deleted user › JoyLuck 2-Jul-03/11:06 PM Reply
Your language, your content and the fact that it isn't poetry. It may be another form of art but its garbage to me.
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 2-Jul-03/11:25 PM Reply
so now you're judging my language and content?
i'm sorry my poetry doesn't go along with your morals and perceptions but.alsdfla;sdjfl;kajsdf

SUCK IT
[n/a] deleted user › JoyLuck 2-Jul-03/11:57 PM Reply
Look, JoyLuck, you asked what offended me. I told you. Don't ask the question if you don't want to know the answer and if you want to be a real writer, stop being so defensive and calling names (all of you).
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 3-Jul-03/12:02 AM Reply
hey MUSEHEART if you dont' expect reply's then don't critique. of course i'll be defensive if you say my poem is not a poem and that it is garbage. but did i tell you to stop or be quiet? nope.
[n/a] deleted user › JoyLuck 3-Jul-03/12:06 AM Reply
No you to me to "suck it."

Really now...
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 3-Jul-03/12:08 AM Reply
ha it's a little late
[n/a] horus8 › deleted user 30-Jun-03/2:14 PM Reply
Don't lash out at joyluck just because you're a guilt stricken jealous Asian whore.
[n/a] deleted user › horus8 2-Jul-03/11:09 PM Reply
No one is lashing out but you. You are so immature that you resort to calling me names when you know nothing about me.
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 2-Jul-03/11:26 PM Reply
don't mess with california
[n/a] deleted user › JoyLuck 3-Jul-03/12:00 AM Reply
Who me? We having a civil war now? You are ridiculous.
Maybe you don't know who you are 'messing' with.
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 3-Jul-03/12:03 AM Reply
threats ? lol
[n/a] deleted user › JoyLuck 3-Jul-03/12:08 AM Reply
"don't mess with california"

Threats? :)
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 3-Jul-03/12:11 AM Reply
threats?
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> › deleted user 3-Jul-03/11:20 AM Reply
I know your poetry fucking sucks and your user name is a big glowing pink tampon. Good god what else do we need.
[n/a] horus8 › deleted user 30-Jun-03/2:21 PM Reply
And it doesn't say anything? What are you blind? Because, I believe it says a lot.

1) For one, it's a new form of dada poetry entirely that this beautiful young man created in his mind as easily as it takes you to eat a gallon of ice cream.

2)It clearly says he's lonely, horny, stoned, bored, observant and artistic, not to mention getting a free show.

3)Uses words to not only create an entirely new way of using poetry as art, but does it with more humor then you could muster up from another lonely night of eating fritos and watching three's company, again.

4)Proves to the world that you have yet to have a real orgasm, so quick faking it bitch and go finger bang yourself 'till you piss and collapse please, now! Get!
[n/a] deleted user › horus8 2-Jul-03/11:10 PM Reply
"One always speaks badly when one has nothing to say."
--Voltaire
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 2-Jul-03/11:24 PM Reply
okay let's throw around quotes !!!!!
[n/a] deleted user › JoyLuck 2-Jul-03/11:54 PM Reply
Why not? There are wiser ones that came before.
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 3-Jul-03/12:04 AM Reply
yes
but people use quotes out of context
[n/a] deleted user › JoyLuck 3-Jul-03/12:09 AM Reply
Sometimes they do, you are right. That one stands on its own, don't you think?
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 30-Jun-03/3:04 PM Reply
ok i'll tell you what this shit means.

- (alone) is lonely. trapped in his room from the outer world except the little window.
- (alone) smokes weed by himself which means he has no friends to smoke with. stoners don't smoke by themselves.
- (alone) is prolly jerking off to what is going on above.
- (whiteboy)(asianwhore) are fucking. actually, he's eating her out. the room above has a door and afan. sadly no palms or cacti or a cat cuz...no room.. :(
- my alias is also JOYLUCK. Joyluck club. i dun really wanna explain this cuz the identity of (alone) isn't really defined.
[n/a] deleted user › JoyLuck 2-Jul-03/11:12 PM Reply
You call your own work "shit."
Don't bother. I don't read shit.
At least not more than once.
[n/a] JoyLuck › deleted user 2-Jul-03/11:23 PM Reply
i wrote you something

http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=54400
[10] Luzr 1-Jul-03/8:48 PM Reply
Shouldn't this be a concrete? Incredible by the way.
[n/a] Roisin 2-Jul-03/3:29 PM Reply
This is amazing, never thought i could laugh so much at some words in the shape of a house. Genius, fuck the people who say it isn't funny-it's humour is in the fact it is a poem/picture. 10
[n/a] JoyLuck › Roisin 2-Jul-03/11:28 PM Reply
not only is it humorous
it has meaning
or it's just
shit
haha
[10] cleverdevice 3-Jul-03/6:29 AM Reply
i like the alternative take here.
[8] david 4-Jul-03/1:14 PM Reply
A wonderful piece in the tradition of concrete and typographical poetry. Well done.
[10] daniella 8-Jul-03/9:24 PM Reply
bravo oooh
[10] Lifeboatman 15-Jul-03/4:54 AM Reply
Sheer genius, 10
[n/a] TearsOnRoses 11-Aug-04/12:33 AM Reply
Took me awhile to see the picture. Lol