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MotherF*ckers Who Fuck Above/Two Story Apartment (Other) by JoyLuck JL
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ROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROOFROO
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ceilingceilingceilingceilingcei
w f w
a fanfan a
l l
l l
w ddd w
a (whiteboy) ooo a
l (asianwhore) ooo l
l BEDBEDBED rrr l
floorfloorfloorfloorfloorfloorf
ceilingceilingceilingceilingcei
w w
a a
l we win l
l ed dow l
w wee w
a d a
l (alone) l
l BEDBEDBEDBED l
floorfloorfloorfloorfloorfloorf
Up the ladder:
Winter
Down the ladder:
Untitled.
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.047619
Posted: June 25, 2003 9:35 PM PDT; Last modified: June 25, 2003 9:37 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.0476017 Overall Rank: 1213 Comments:
heh, cool.
You are briliant, dealing out these dada postcards. I truly love them.
MUHAHA...perfect
How can you call this poetry? Other is right. There is no category for this garbage. I mean really, you don't say anything and it is offending.
first of all
how does this garbage offend you?
ROOFROOFROOFROOFROO
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EARTHQUAKE
hahah i was starring at that and i was like
wtf is that??? then i saw EARTHQUAKE and i fell out of my chair laughing
JEFF GOLDBLOOM TELEPORTING IN A NEW MOVIE CALLED "THE FLY PART FOUR".
Your language, your content and the fact that it isn't poetry. It may be another form of art but its garbage to me.
so now you're judging my language and content?
i'm sorry my poetry doesn't go along with your morals and perceptions but.alsdfla;sdjfl;kajsdf SUCK IT
Look, JoyLuck, you asked what offended me. I told you. Don't ask the question if you don't want to know the answer and if you want to be a real writer, stop being so defensive and calling names (all of you).
hey MUSEHEART if you dont' expect reply's then don't critique. of course i'll be defensive if you say my poem is not a poem and that it is garbage. but did i tell you to stop or be quiet? nope.
No you to me to "suck it."
Really now...
ha it's a little late
Don't lash out at joyluck just because you're a guilt stricken jealous Asian whore.
No one is lashing out but you. You are so immature that you resort to calling me names when you know nothing about me.
don't mess with california
Who me? We having a civil war now? You are ridiculous.
Maybe you don't know who you are 'messing' with.
threats ? lol
"don't mess with california"
Threats? :)
threats?
I know your poetry fucking sucks and your user name is a big glowing pink tampon. Good god what else do we need.
And it doesn't say anything? What are you blind? Because, I believe it says a lot.
1) For one, it's a new form of dada poetry entirely that this beautiful young man created in his mind as easily as it takes you to eat a gallon of ice cream. 2)It clearly says he's lonely, horny, stoned, bored, observant and artistic, not to mention getting a free show. 3)Uses words to not only create an entirely new way of using poetry as art, but does it with more humor then you could muster up from another lonely night of eating fritos and watching three's company, again. 4)Proves to the world that you have yet to have a real orgasm, so quick faking it bitch and go finger bang yourself 'till you piss and collapse please, now! Get!
"One always speaks badly when one has nothing to say."
--Voltaire
okay let's throw around quotes !!!!!
Why not? There are wiser ones that came before.
yes
but people use quotes out of context
Sometimes they do, you are right. That one stands on its own, don't you think?
ok i'll tell you what this shit means.
- (alone) is lonely. trapped in his room from the outer world except the little window. - (alone) smokes weed by himself which means he has no friends to smoke with. stoners don't smoke by themselves. - (alone) is prolly jerking off to what is going on above. - (whiteboy)(asianwhore) are fucking. actually, he's eating her out. the room above has a door and afan. sadly no palms or cacti or a cat cuz...no room.. :( - my alias is also JOYLUCK. Joyluck club. i dun really wanna explain this cuz the identity of (alone) isn't really defined.
You call your own work "shit."
Don't bother. I don't read shit. At least not more than once.
Shouldn't this be a concrete? Incredible by the way.
This is amazing, never thought i could laugh so much at some words in the shape of a house. Genius, fuck the people who say it isn't funny-it's humour is in the fact it is a poem/picture. 10
not only is it humorous
it has meaning or it's just shit haha
i like the alternative take here.
A wonderful piece in the tradition of concrete and typographical poetry. Well done.
bravo oooh
Sheer genius, 10
Took me awhile to see the picture. Lol
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no the door is against a wall so it is unviewable
but a cactus would be nice