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2-Jan-03/7:37 AM |
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any poem that starts out "oh baby" is hard to take seriously.
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| Re: Frustration by DewDrop |
7-Jan-03/8:56 AM |
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I like this a lot, but I think you may have misclassified it as a limerick.
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15-Jan-03/9:29 AM |
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too much time on your hands, apparently. Not very limericky.
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15-Jan-03/9:31 AM |
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| Re: Track.... by Topaz Servias |
15-Jan-03/9:33 AM |
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| Re: Mommy, why does -=DarkAngel=- use 'an' so much? by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
15-Jan-03/9:36 AM |
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I suppose its all in good fun. I was a smidge distracted by the lack of line break separating the rhymes in the 3rd line of each limerick.
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| Re: Cat by Topaz Servias |
15-Jan-03/9:38 AM |
Limericks use the distinctive rhyming scheme of a-a-b-b-a, where the first two lines set the scene, the third and fourth lines quickly twist things about, and the fifth line hammers the conclusion. (first, second, and fifth lines are trimeter, third and fourth are dimeter).
this is from the help screen, not my original writing.
Limericks focus on the absurd or the silly when they're not downright naughty.
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| Re: Jockey by betty swallox |
15-Jan-03/9:38 AM |
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a bit wordy--it muddles up the pace.
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| Re: perversions 2: the revenge by razorgrin |
15-Jan-03/9:40 AM |
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very nicely done. bravo and two shakes.
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| Re: Bobjim, Jimbob by Spider-Man |
15-Jan-03/9:41 AM |
knob?
Also, I'm seeing a pattern here of people making fun of one another. I hope its all in good fun.
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| Re: The blue light special. by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
15-Jan-03/9:42 AM |
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last line should rhyme with the first two.
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| Re: AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
15-Jan-03/9:43 AM |
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tremendously brave and reverent (sorry)...downright boy scouty, i must say!
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| Re: A Short Letter by Ranger |
15-Jan-03/9:45 AM |
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nit witty, but succinct. bravo.
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| Re: horus8 by sooz |
17-Jan-03/10:47 AM |
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| Re: Bloodsucker by hobojo |
17-Jan-03/10:49 AM |
rhyme scheme, OK
but the rhythm is amiss.
a fine poem, but not really limericky.
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| Re: Perversions 3: Payback by razorgrin |
17-Jan-03/11:30 AM |
get rid of "who" in the first one,
and th elast one, while the premise is good, doesn't seem to flow as well as the others. overall, an 8
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| Re: late night activities by sooz |
17-Jan-03/11:31 AM |
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again, line lengths disrupt what the rhythm should be.
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| Re: gerbil by betty swallox |
17-Jan-03/11:33 AM |
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| Re: anonymous guy by sooz |
17-Jan-03/11:34 AM |
as i knotted his noose
(simply becasue he couldn't scream and dangle) otherwise, I like this! a valiant job. 9.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
17-Jan-03/11:35 AM |
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you've misclassified this as a limerick.
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