on Random thoughts poem-do not try to find a meaning for there are too many. by lunar
13 Jan 2003, 8:30 PM
It's good, but get the emotions organized and not so vague. 7
on Fuck the system by which we live by Lucifer
13 Jan 2003, 8:35 PM
What a sorry piece of crap. Take care.
on The shirt I wore to dinner. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
13 Jan 2003, 8:28 PM
WOW. Have a nice day. 0
on Track.... by Topaz Servias
6 Jan 2003, 7:52 PM
I have seen the murky line
On which your soul will twine
Sandwhich is what you wanted right?
Dirty room like the twilight.
On which your soul will twine
Sandwhich is what you wanted right?
Dirty room like the twilight.
on When I wake... by Topaz Servias
6 Jan 2003, 7:54 PM
Intersting, I wonder whom you are talking about. man-with-pants
on The canary's last song by <{Baba^Yaga}>
28 Dec 2002, 6:47 PM
"melody in a cage", I like the metaphor. Do You like Robert Frost?
on Maria by Nicholas Monson
28 Dec 2002, 7:09 PM
Very NIce, "Whom is the correct grammar", don't worry. I also feel that" Then I first espied her.
She had beauty to excess!
A laugh to shiver spines -
A Galician princess.
What mystic Yorkshire root
Was stirred in quiemada?
What supernatural spice
Was robbed from heaven's larder?"
is very descriptive in imagery.
She had beauty to excess!
A laugh to shiver spines -
A Galician princess.
What mystic Yorkshire root
Was stirred in quiemada?
What supernatural spice
Was robbed from heaven's larder?"
is very descriptive in imagery.
on some deleted poem
25 Dec 2002, 7:09 PM
First of all, you only use "an" before "A, E, I, O, U". Second of all, posting this crap and calling it poetry, insults all poets and poems. When you learn how to properly use grammer and write something worth reading, feel free to write then. Caducas, you are also an Idot who should jump ou the window and end all of our sufferings. Calling Crap, fine piece of work.
on The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus
25 Dec 2002, 6:57 PM
I liked the gist of this poem, but the meataphors you decided to use hold no particular meaning in literature or even logically. " Crocodiles drown in synchronized sorrow," I really thought of this particualr verse as, well stupid. Don't be offeneded, as I said like the theme behind this poem and thought it better than many of the others I have read. I'm only trying to help you out. It would be alot better if you added symbolism that made sense. for instance, a candle is usally related to life, a hawk is reffered to as the soul.
on Sod this! This poem can't rhyme for toffee... by Yardbird
22 Nov 2002, 7:48 PM
Funny.
on I'm a homicidal kind of guy (spoof of every 'down-home' song you've ever heard) by Yardbird
22 Nov 2002, 7:52 PM
I like it.
on some deleted poem
22 Nov 2002, 7:34 PM
I would rather watch a whole cow deep fry than read this again.
on some deleted poem
22 Nov 2002, 7:34 PM
I would rather watch a whole cow deep fry than read this again.
on I will love you forever by savannah
22 Nov 2002, 7:44 PM
Do you know what Free verse is?
And I will love to hate this poem forever, with all my heart. cliche
You should really write for Hallmark.
And I will love to hate this poem forever, with all my heart. cliche
You should really write for Hallmark.
on some deleted poem
22 Nov 2002, 7:46 PM
Interesting, "seems to me like only a part of a poem"
This poem is amazingly gay
spiff of off punk rock
sentimental CRAP out of an old sock.