| Re: Yet more woe by Stephen Robins |
16-Feb-07/3:12 PM |
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Have you seen Otis Lee Crenshaw (Rich Hall) do his prison rape song?
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| Re: Plurals by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
19-Feb-07/1:16 AM |
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The plural of "terrible poeme" is "www.allpoetry.com"
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| Re: A Night out With Chaucer by cleverdevice |
19-Feb-07/1:19 AM |
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I have finally worked out where you stole this little beauty from. Leave the Bailey classics alone, you thieving cad! -bow'ls-
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3-Mar-07/8:28 AM |
My life in jeopardy
Mudered in cold blood, that's what I'm gonna be
I ain't been home since Friday night and now my wife
is coming after me...
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| Re: A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius |
3-Mar-07/8:29 AM |
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This is the level of mediocrity to which the majority of us aspire.
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3-Mar-07/8:31 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
3-Mar-07/8:35 AM |
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Good metre, but stanza two is grammatically...well, ambiguous at best.
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| Re: Quantum Reality by Quarton |
8-Mar-07/1:36 AM |
Interesting read - in a few places it sounds more science textbook-y than poetic ('ever increasing complexity' etc.) I liked stanza 5 and its cosmic dance - perhaps a reference to Holst's Planets Suite would have been appropriate there?
It's certainly a piece with some education behind it - I like that, but my failing is a short attention span. Maybe cutting it into two or three sections would make it easier for simpletons like myself to read in one sitting?
Good poem though.
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| Re: A whole load of cunts by mr cunt |
8-Mar-07/1:43 AM |
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! You are hilarious!
Those were ip addresses from my college system.
-10- for making me cry with laughter.
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| Re: Mirror by Quarton |
8-Mar-07/1:51 AM |
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I like the gentleness of this piece, if you could scratch out a couple of the cliched phrases and put a little more innovation into some lines (such as the last one) I'd enjoy this even more.
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8-Mar-07/2:03 AM |
"So you took him to bed and when he wanted sex you stormed out in a moral huff?"
Besides, I was that diner and I did not appreciate it when a stranger went in me. I may have stood up, but I'd rather not have my stool pushed in.
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| Re: Dancing for dinner by fevriere |
8-Mar-07/2:04 AM |
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| Re: A Wanderlust To The New by fevriere |
8-Mar-07/2:16 AM |
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Aside from 'smally dance' this is so good. I don't know why people haven't read you more on here.
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| Re: Rock and Roll by wilco |
8-Mar-07/2:19 AM |
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I'd like to hear this one, as I can't tell whether the rhyme of 'fury' and 'money' (and 'Mississippi') will be distracting or not.
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| Re: Hallelujah by hungry_shepherd |
10-Mar-07/9:31 AM |
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You must know, surely, that any appreciator of Cohen (or, more likely, Buckley) will not be able to bring themself to accept this.
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| Re: Ben Fogle by Stephen Robins |
11-Mar-07/2:34 PM |
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I do hope you've been watching Crufts. He was particularly splendidly attired today.
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| Re: Within by drnick |
13-Mar-07/1:10 PM |
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This is brilliant, just brilliant
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| Re: The Landscape by Sasha |
13-Mar-07/1:13 PM |
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I assume the translation is as good as it reads. The poeme's 50-50 on the ace/turd spectrum though.
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| Re: Pedaling West by Dovina |
13-Mar-07/1:19 PM |
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This is more like a diary entry in verses. I don't think there's anything wrong with that per se, but it needs to be delivered in either an interesting or easyflowing manner - I hate to say this but rhymes would do the trick here. It feels like you've gone for straight iambic meter but I think it needs more than that. Either that or some truly staggering imagery throughout.
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13-Mar-07/1:20 PM |
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