regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-02/9:12 PM
This is a very visual poem. It is also a very human poem. This is where the final stanza gets its power. I assume you have revised it a few time since my respected fellows commented; I think it's beautiful.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-02/9:20 PM
wut -> what (???) I'm not really arguing for formal English here. "Wanna" works well with the spirit of the poem, but "wut" for "what" which are pronounced the same is just stupid. This poem is very elementary and superficial.
Re: Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit	4-Oct-02/9:21 PM
bumbled bees - I read "humbled bees" at first (it's late) and it worked just as well. Oh, we do torture those bees for that sweet, sticky taste of heaven...
Re: I'll Always Remember by NobodyGirl9	4-Oct-02/9:30 PM
The only word I can think of to describe this poem is "corny". Try adding some imagery. I'm not usually one to stand up and declaim about what poetry is, but this is prose. The two things that this piece has that might make it a poem are the rhymes, and the fact that it is broken up into stanzas. Still, because it is so severely lacking in artistry, I must label it prose. Get yourself a weblog and post this as a diary entry.
Re: The Seagull Reader by SpiffyDoo	4-Oct-02/9:33 PM
Good Lord... You wouldn't have had to endure a creative writing class at UNB, would you? I like it though. I can't imagine a better piece describing the Seagull.
Re: A Sign on a Giant Donut at a Twenty Four Hour a Day Donut Shop Overlooking Pacific Coast Highway in Sunset Beach California at Eight in the Evening on September Twenty Fourth Two-Thousand and Two by Dark Angle	4-Oct-02/9:36 PM
Hehehe... I love it!
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Oct-02/9:43 AM
This may be a ridiculously stupid comment, but did you write this with magnetic poetry? Worshipping the Apparatus sounds like such a magnetic poetry line. I like the line, "Your smooth diamond head is an easy-girl's vision" because it works so well. The break between "I am drunk // On sweet, mad love." is effective.
Re: Wednesday's Breaking by poetandknowit	12-Oct-02/1:13 PM
The first stanza doesn't have the power of the second. The birdsongs, the house dog, the roommate are distant from the scene not in that they're not involved with the scene, but in that they don't seem real at all. To me, the way you present them makes them completely lifeless and irrelevant to the action. I would work on everything before "will wrestle from" Why "dead shape"?
Re: Shut Out by joho117	12-Oct-02/1:20 PM
Have you ever heard a song called "Don't You Want Me Anymore?" by Pulp? It's the same idea, better expressed. Shouldn't it be, "you love me no longer". how much does it hurt you? This is just a statement of fact. Describe your feelings.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Oct-02/1:31 PM
This is my favourite piece of yours, under all of the identities you've created for yourself on here. One of my earliest poems was about how Paris is too warm in the springtime. But I'll accept this because sadness makes things chilly.
Re: Poem #5 (of a series of poems for Boo) by Owner of the Sky	12-Oct-02/2:47 PM
I like this, it's very refreshing.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Oct-02/8:30 PM
It's interesting that you write a piece about wanting people to respect you for who you are, yet you use homophobic lines such as "Many of you will think its gay or maybe just isn't right" to do it. Learn to spell. Learn that there is more to poetry than rhyme scheme.
Re: Irony by w~* ATHENA *~w	12-Oct-02/8:39 PM
Uhh... I could just be overtired but... where's the irony?
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Oct-02/1:22 PM
Mmm... Waffle!
Re: Girlz by liljsmith87	16-Oct-02/5:21 PM
There are these two girls and I love them more than anything They have everything I want And nothing but them is anymore important to me But there of course are some problems Ones that are not easy to fix I try my best to solve them But of course I can't get rid of the pricks let alone this one bitch Who, used to be my friend Until she got pissed Made one mistake And she put me on "THE LIST" So now Angie isn't my friend All because I went wrong Terryn made my life miserable Wished at first I didnt belong But then I look at the good side Happy the other girl I love is still my friend And try to make sure This friendship won't end. (I took the liberty of correcting your spelling)
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Oct-02/8:24 PM
Je t'aime, meme quand tu ecris des monstriosites superficielles come celle-ci.
Re: You Can by Dariana	17-Oct-02/5:28 PM
I only just read this and I'd almost call it plagiarism. It's like borrowing someone else's essay, then changing the words to make it your own. Climb every mountain.
Re: Love by little_angel_maria	20-Oct-02/8:01 PM
Waste. Not waist. His love won't come back. He probably isn't worth it either. Don't you value yourself enough to live without him?
Re: love by little_angel_maria	21-Oct-02/4:47 PM
Don't they teach grammar in the schools in England?
Re: My Friend? by Blade	21-Oct-02/5:40 PM
Is the bad spelling an ironic statement on everyone's comments against Maria's spelling, or are you just illiterate?