on some deleted poem
30 Dec 2002, 8:48 AM
Non Conformist poetry yet it kicks like a mule in places and i can respect that -7-
on some deleted poem
30 Dec 2002, 8:52 AM
This is your best so far, decorative non demanding poetry leaving a guy at work wanting to get the fuck outta here -7-
on Frozen Angel by Ranger
30 Dec 2002, 8:39 AM
I wrote serpent of my bliss based on this (behold a short poem in telling you)
This gripped me like a hangmans noose. Horus this is captivating, Did you write this non stop in some kind of emotional spontaneous combustion? The relationship with your father made the pips in my adams explode **FUCK*** this was one work where the reader is consumed by the subjects in the story, my initial reaction was 'shit its a long one' but like a good book you can't put it down.
When your hearts open horus your one of the best on this site. I dont think you need to be affected by comments on your poems, do not react other than in your writing that is your gifted forte.
I respect this work, its up their with the one you wrote about your children, yet this shows you as the son, the man, and the kindred spirit you have no choice in being. Your work is an illustration of darkness but the clarity in the way you tell it makes it shine, pardon the cliches but a poetic synopsis of your work is apt for a piece as honest and reflective as this.
This is your Golden Q Tip award for showing a side of man most conceal =======10======= (like you probably give a fuck)
When your hearts open horus your one of the best on this site. I dont think you need to be affected by comments on your poems, do not react other than in your writing that is your gifted forte.
I respect this work, its up their with the one you wrote about your children, yet this shows you as the son, the man, and the kindred spirit you have no choice in being. Your work is an illustration of darkness but the clarity in the way you tell it makes it shine, pardon the cliches but a poetic synopsis of your work is apt for a piece as honest and reflective as this.
This is your Golden Q Tip award for showing a side of man most conceal =======10======= (like you probably give a fuck)
on some deleted poem
30 Dec 2002, 5:24 AM
Wow ! a rhyme from Gods Wife, I'm calling the cops.
should totured be tortured?
should totured be tortured?
on some deleted poem
30 Dec 2002, 6:31 AM
Liked stanza one as an intro, but this is just one long intro with no subject, are you looking for a date?
on some deleted poem
30 Dec 2002, 6:32 AM
Fresh
on some deleted poem
30 Dec 2002, 6:43 AM
peace and love peace and love peace and love
on some deleted poem
30 Dec 2002, 8:53 AM
At best - mediocre
At worst - boring
I have seen what you can do
At worst - boring
I have seen what you can do
on "Bored?" "Let's eat my nuts?" by Bachus
20 Dec 2002, 5:27 AM
The worse thing to eat with nuts has to be cheese.
on "Bored?" "Let's eat my nuts?" by Bachus
20 Dec 2002, 5:28 AM
god that was disgusting i apologize -DOCCCCCC !
on some deleted poem
23 Dec 2002, 3:47 AM
The first and last 2 stanzas are beautifully written, another artform in vocab, do you comment on this site?
on Splendid Discovery by blkarakagain
23 Dec 2002, 3:53 AM
I like your writing it has a naked unimitable style but think if you condensed some of your work it would assault the senses more. I cant help but laugh in disbelief at the 0 vote, people spend so much time creating their best for a split second vote violating junkie - have what it deserves a 6 with potential
on some deleted poem
20 Dec 2002, 8:54 AM
Reminiscent of a properly pulled guiness, deep, dark, satisfying, densely rich and tasteful. (I have to equate poetry to day to different drinks as its pub season) -8-
Happy Xmas MMOORE
Happy Xmas MMOORE
on Forgotten by famenglory
2 Jan 2003, 5:24 AM
Original, well done
on The world by Sugarbbybuttrfly
2 Jan 2003, 5:27 AM
Not too bad but book should be replaced by endless lines that frown upon mankind, but its your baby, think you should play around with this it could be VERY good instead of well - good ! heres a 7
on Fortune cookie by INTRANSIT
3 Jan 2003, 9:08 AM
fanfuckingtastic, and appropriately tuned for YK03 resolutions.