| Re: "Bored?" "Let's eat my nuts?" by Bachus |
20-Dec-02/5:27 AM |
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The worse thing to eat with nuts has to be cheese.
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| Re: "Bored?" "Let's eat my nuts?" by Bachus |
20-Dec-02/5:28 AM |
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god that was disgusting i apologize -DOCCCCCC !
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20-Dec-02/8:54 AM |
Reminiscent of a properly pulled guiness, deep, dark, satisfying, densely rich and tasteful. (I have to equate poetry to day to different drinks as its pub season) -8-
Happy Xmas MMOORE
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| Re: Foreplay by INTRANSIT |
23-Dec-02/3:44 AM |
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This is cruel man, not foreplay, you do all that to her then say goodbye -your a bad man I/T, the end kinda works though, and one enjoyed it did one. -7-
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23-Dec-02/3:47 AM |
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The first and last 2 stanzas are beautifully written, another artform in vocab, do you comment on this site?
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| Re: Splendid Discovery by blkarakagain |
23-Dec-02/3:53 AM |
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I like your writing it has a naked unimitable style but think if you condensed some of your work it would assault the senses more. I cant help but laugh in disbelief at the 0 vote, people spend so much time creating their best for a split second vote violating junkie - have what it deserves a 6 with potential
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30-Dec-02/5:24 AM |
Wow ! a rhyme from Gods Wife, I'm calling the cops.
should totured be tortured?
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30-Dec-02/6:31 AM |
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Liked stanza one as an intro, but this is just one long intro with no subject, are you looking for a date?
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30-Dec-02/6:32 AM |
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30-Dec-02/6:43 AM |
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peace and love peace and love peace and love
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| Re: Frozen Angel by Ranger |
30-Dec-02/8:39 AM |
I wrote serpent of my bliss based on this (behold a short poem in telling you)
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30-Dec-02/8:48 AM |
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Non Conformist poetry yet it kicks like a mule in places and i can respect that -7-
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30-Dec-02/8:52 AM |
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This is your best so far, decorative non demanding poetry leaving a guy at work wanting to get the fuck outta here -7-
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30-Dec-02/8:53 AM |
At best - mediocre
At worst - boring
I have seen what you can do
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| Re: Blues by Christof |
30-Dec-02/9:14 AM |
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| Re: Wanking by Bobjim |
30-Dec-02/10:04 AM |
easy come, easy go,
whip it or flip it
sexy snow
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| Re: Hewed by horus8 |
2-Jan-03/4:14 AM |
This gripped me like a hangmans noose. Horus this is captivating, Did you write this non stop in some kind of emotional spontaneous combustion? The relationship with your father made the pips in my adams explode **FUCK*** this was one work where the reader is consumed by the subjects in the story, my initial reaction was 'shit its a long one' but like a good book you can't put it down.
When your hearts open horus your one of the best on this site. I dont think you need to be affected by comments on your poems, do not react other than in your writing that is your gifted forte.
I respect this work, its up their with the one you wrote about your children, yet this shows you as the son, the man, and the kindred spirit you have no choice in being. Your work is an illustration of darkness but the clarity in the way you tell it makes it shine, pardon the cliches but a poetic synopsis of your work is apt for a piece as honest and reflective as this.
This is your Golden Q Tip award for showing a side of man most conceal =======10======= (like you probably give a fuck)
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| Re: Forgotten by famenglory |
2-Jan-03/5:24 AM |
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| Re: The world by Sugarbbybuttrfly |
2-Jan-03/5:27 AM |
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Not too bad but book should be replaced by endless lines that frown upon mankind, but its your baby, think you should play around with this it could be VERY good instead of well - good ! heres a 7
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| Re: Fortune cookie by INTRANSIT |
3-Jan-03/9:08 AM |
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fanfuckingtastic, and appropriately tuned for YK03 resolutions.
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