Re: Joshua by Bachus	26-Apr-03/2:03 PM
Beautiful, almost cried.
Re: Joshua by Bachus	26-Apr-03/2:01 PM
Beautiful.
Re: a comment on Landscapes In The Sky by anitawit	26-Apr-03/1:40 PM
'(a) myriad' is right, thanks
Re: a comment on Landscapes In The Sky by anitawit	26-Apr-03/1:37 PM
Don't have no wings like some - got to use clouds; ain't creativity, only necessity.
Re: a comment on I Speak of Expanses by anitawit	26-Apr-03/1:30 PM
Yes, yes, yes. Definitely increases the sense of expansion, may be I'll bring myself to lose the last line soon.
Re: a comment on I Speak of Expanses by anitawit	26-Apr-03/1:23 PM
nice repetition of repetative use of repeated repetition
Re: a comment on Landscapes In The Sky by anitawit	25-Apr-03/1:55 PM
I had 'myriads' first but changed it. I thought 'myriad' was collective, isn't it? You are right, I just wrote it; it was one beautiful evening in the mountains of Nepal, there were forms and colours in the clouds ... Maybe, because I'm a painter
Re: a comment on I Speak of Expanses by anitawit	25-Apr-03/1:45 PM
How about - 'Yellow fields stretched 'round me' and 'Into this darkness I alight'?
Re: Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT	22-Apr-03/11:49 PM
How about 'Orangutan' instead of 'Orangutans'? Beautiful.
Re: For my wife by INTRANSIT	21-Apr-03/10:31 PM
Beautiful, esp. last four lines.
Re: a comment on Friends by anitawit	12-Apr-03/11:47 PM
Hello to you. Thanks for the comment.
Re: a comment on The Advent Of Monsoon by anitawit	2-Jan-03/10:52 PM
i thought i did leave some clues in the 'brilliant blue' of the sky and the 'ultramarine hills', not enough? separate the light and the dark lines altogether instead of mingling them?
Re: a comment on The Advent Of Monsoon by anitawit	2-Jan-03/10:46 PM
some sort of a preface to the advent of monsoons, perhaps?
Re: a comment on The Advent Of Monsoon by anitawit	2-Jan-03/10:39 PM
if you notice, 'yellow sunshine' is cheery, it has 'slender fingers'- but it withdraws and the 'ominous white' gets in, i wanted to contrast the yellow sunshine to the ominous white- monsoon fog and the milky opacity of the sky during continuous rains.wanted to contrast the warmth of the sun with the chill of rainy weather
Re: Blues by Christof	2-Jan-03/10:22 PM
Very very good.
Re: a comment on Kernel by anitawit	2-Jan-03/10:01 PM
Not at all. In fact i am greatful you gave so much time & effort. i get the idea from your edit, but i'm not satisfied yet, will work on it and edit with your advice in mind.
Re: a comment on The Advent Of Monsoon by anitawit	2-Jan-03/9:55 PM
wanted to create a sense of - personification- in 'dribble silently'- as in a creepy creature dribbling...wanting to be let in... uh, don't know if it worked.
Re: a comment on He Told Me Once by anitawit	2-Jan-03/9:49 PM
he decided to stay, but the torment has lost its keen, much to my dismay!
Re: a comment on Kernel by anitawit	2-Jan-03/8:57 PM
Should I work on the last three lines at the expense of the shape...?
Re: a comment on Kernel by anitawit	2-Jan-03/8:54 PM
Thanks for the comment, will work on it.