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Landscapes In The Sky (Free verse) by anitawit
(17.7.95) Yesterday evening there were lots of landscapes in the sky To choose from; I visited the remotest of them all Embarking on a cloud I floated past Mysterious blue shadows And crystalline waters that held no reflections Past rosy flecks preening themselves in the setting sun Past deep darknesses recessing irregular pieces of light Past slashes of hypnotic blue that hinted at the endless, Through ripped centres of the surface Myriad of this new dimension I explored on a cloud -- One of many that inspired the landscapes Yesterday evening, in the sky.

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Overall Rank: 6260
Posted: April 25, 2003 12:31 AM PDT; Last modified: April 25, 2003 12:31 AM PDT
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[8] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.72 | 25-Apr-03/6:49 AM | Reply
I think myriad(s). I think when you wrote this, you sat down and wrote without thinking, just wrote. and it works. 8 I think the other is better because you put work into it. both are swell.
[n/a] anitawit @ 203.94.201.162 > INTRANSIT | 25-Apr-03/1:55 PM | Reply
I had 'myriads' first but changed it. I thought 'myriad' was collective, isn't it?
You are right, I just wrote it; it was one beautiful evening in the mountains of Nepal, there were forms and colours in the clouds ... Maybe, because I'm a painter
[8] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.139 > anitawit | 25-Apr-03/6:20 PM | Reply
technically, myriad is collective. I think more proper would be plural or (a) myriad. check with your local dictionary, to be sure.
[n/a] anitawit @ 203.94.194.202 > INTRANSIT | 26-Apr-03/1:40 PM | Reply
'(a) myriad' is right, thanks
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.98 | 25-Apr-03/11:44 AM | Reply
You have to be jolly creative to write a poeme about soaring on clouds.
[n/a] anitawit @ 203.94.194.202 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 26-Apr-03/1:37 PM | Reply
Don't have no wings like some - got to use clouds; ain't creativity, only necessity.
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