Re: Sniper by nightii	20-Oct-02/8:19 PM
Never-the-less, living in the neighbourhood can't be much fun just at the moment.
Re: Hedgehog's Dilemma by Shin-Bojangles	20-Oct-02/8:29 PM
Apologies accepted, I still don't understand it.
Re: Hedgehog's Dilemma by Shin-Bojangles	20-Oct-02/8:30 PM
Apologies accepted, I still don't understand it.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Oct-02/8:37 PM
This starts well but soon loses itself, the god and the bad is in the rhythm, and the lack of it.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Nov-02/8:36 PM
Hi, I think this is pretty good but in my opinion it suffers because of the repitition, not of the first line, which works, but a few other lines and concepts are repeated in a way that seems unnecessary to me. Still a good effort.
Re: The View On Life by Deb_djb3113	14-Feb-03/10:30 PM
For me it looks very rough, in terms of the grammar and such, nice idea though.
Re: Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik	14-Feb-03/10:35 PM
As far as I know a sonnet is written in iambic pentametre, which is not what you have here, that does not make it a good or bad poem, just not a sonnet.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Feb-03/11:02 PM
I too found it a little confusing, though not as bad as things I have read in the Norton Anthology, the use of Child as the last word didn't seem to fit either. Otherwise it was nice grows on you a bit if you read it several times.
Re: Mastermind by wOrnella Mutiw	15-Feb-03/10:19 PM
Hi, 1 spelling error 'schizophrenic' I liked the beginning, and understand now why you liked Parting th Curtain, I didn't find the connection, or else you took a sharp turn, at His Momma.... nice though. I really liked the beginning.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Feb-03/10:46 PM
Hi, Sad poem's often seem stronger than happy ones, is that we feel the negatives so much more or simply that we take the good times for granted. Vindictive or Vendetta but not Vendictive to my knowledge, though i am always willing to learn. Both the above are from the same italian root however, and someone has to make up the new words.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Mar-03/9:14 PM
Hi, I would have drown myself in your skin I think this line could be better.
Re: the black light by crwncka1	23-May-03/10:11 PM
Forest is spelt with olny one r = forest
Re: Activating your Infinity by horus8	25-May-03/3:57 AM
Quite an interesting story, reading the comments is almost as much fun.
Re: Timing by INTRANSIT	26-May-03/10:40 PM
I liked Definity, though I have never heard it before, but I lost it on the high point in my eyes, probab;ly a result of the low point in my mind, it has a nice feel though.
Re: Hold That Pose by Wulf	26-May-03/10:43 PM
Very interesting, nice work
Re: I Am(Defined) by lil cindy lu who	27-May-03/8:34 PM
I wouldn't go throughing things in the trash bin, the idea of defining yourself in a poem is OK, just work on it, some poems take a lot of reshaping you just have to keep at them.
Re: A Summers Day In Stolen Eden by Mr Pig	27-May-03/8:37 PM
The LSD trip at the beginning was interesting but the second part of the poem was much more poetic.
Re: The other side of a rainbow by thepinkbunnyofdoom	27-May-03/8:39 PM
Not bad imagery here. I like it.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-May-03/8:44 PM
Sounds like a song lyric to me, what with the repititions and all. I was intrigued by the title and thought it might be a little more critical of religion, oh it was nice anyway.
Re: Plastic Posies by BleedingRose	28-May-03/8:51 PM
As a poem there are a few hiccups in the metre but it was delightful never-the-less.