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The View On Life (Free verse) by Deb_djb3113
If it took 3 steps to freedom
4 steps to jail
1 step to paradise
2 steps to fail
1 kiss to hold me
4 hands to leave
10 single pains
In which i must conceive
2 seconds overdue
but 3 seconds ahead
6 minutes to breath
5 in which are dead
1 way to run
with 4 ways wrong
Too many mistakes
With 1 meaning full song
1 hand follows this way
which direction to go around
14 minutes before I jump
and hit the solid ground
2 minutes would of saved me
3 minutes have just filled
How many beatings?
Before I get killed
SO they all start to count down from 10
10 single hands to poke things and grab
9 open wounds slowly begin to scab
8 shyless faces all turned away
7 strong people hung themselves today
6 pairs of lost and sorrowful eyes
5 shameful people with too many lies
4 drops of blood falling from this life
3 people screamed with a stab from a knife
2 hungry mouths rudly unfead
1 person left
Now pronounced dead
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.75
Weighted score: 5.089402
Overall Rank: 6256
Posted: February 14, 2003 9:13 PM PST; Last modified: February 14, 2003 9:13 PM PST
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