Re: Afraid to love you by lil cindy lu who	29-May-03/8:09 PM
Very nice
regarding some deleted poem...	29-May-03/8:15 PM
Not bad, the line shooting you’s amusing. seems out of sync with your rhyme scheme though
Re: The Search by OneFingerAnswer	13-Jul-03/12:28 AM
I think it should be Plugging one gap only to seal(find) another as it is it doesn't make much sense. On the whole it is a bit repetitive in the second half
Re: A Brand New Eye by EAger to Offend	13-Jul-03/12:29 AM
Interesting.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Jul-03/9:52 PM
Nice imagery, but it does look as if the curator and the chair blend into one another a bit. Also should the chair have two arms.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Jul-03/10:03 PM
Remember, the more common the theme, the rarer, or more beautiful your expression of it needs to be, otherwise it becomes ...just another...
Re: New Forms by Rodavlas	13-Jul-03/10:07 PM
Spelling = views, question boundful, do you mean bountiful A little repetitive on the New Forms bit.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Oct-03/12:20 AM
Very Nice, spelling = Crystalise The last two stanzas are the weakest, I think the punctuation in them could do with a little work, but otherwise excellent.
Re: Whispering (Zero Atmosphere) by Y2kSlamPoet	9-Oct-03/12:22 AM
Very interesting piece, nicely composed and expressed.
Re: The Ballad of Robert Kilroy-Silk by Steaming Dung Heap	12-Jan-04/9:12 AM
I guess he must be English.
Re: Snowflake by fevriere	12-Jan-04/9:15 AM
I lost it in a few places but you are talking about living in a foreign land so I guess that expected
Re: Up. by fevriere	12-Jan-04/9:17 AM
This looks a bit rough to me, like a diamond still partly encased in the rock that was its womb, it needs a little work. But the light is there.
Re: lemuridae by richa	12-Jan-04/9:20 AM
forest's wet or forest-wet. I didn't uderstand the ending at all so I will withold my vote.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Feb-04/11:00 PM
The metre is a bit ropey in places, S1L2, S3L2 S3L4, S4L3 and L4, and most S5 which is the worst in my view, but still it is nicely written.
Re: An Angel by broken_wing11	17-Feb-04/11:03 PM
A little repetitive in the message.
Re: Meditations on a Human Skeleton in a Museum by Sasha	5-Sep-04/9:19 AM
5 for the thought.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Sep-04/9:25 AM
Given your use of repitition here you might want to consider rewriting this as a Villanelle, or other repeating format.
Re: Broken Sonnet by Sasha	5-Sep-04/9:26 AM
A broken 8
Re: The American Soldier by x0lovelylarnx0	5-Sep-04/9:33 AM
Nice to see such intelligent constructive interaction, considering I haven't seen one correctly written sonnet yet I sense a certain imagery of pots and kettles here. Not that the poem is any good, but the criticism is for the most part worse.
Re: Dawn Jig by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	5-Sep-04/9:35 AM
Could you explain how this gets to be called a sonnet???????????