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Ornella Muti is a recipient of the poemWanker award: Mastermind (Free verse) by wOrnella Mutiwfor her unflagging attempts at using poemranker's comment field as an implement of destruction and as a live journal chock full of other people's dirty laundry. Oceans away
in a matchbox
brilliance resides.
-forgotten-
-bastardized-
Cornered
in a nut house.
A scitzophrenic
writes prescriptions,
and the leukimia patient dies.
His momma yells........
As his daddy whips out the
belt.
With Bible tightly gripped
Reciting scriptures
mixed with Black Sabbath
Angel Head.
Up the ladder:
Rumble In The Jungle
Down the ladder:
Obsequies
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.818182
Posted: February 15, 2003 9:04 PM PST; Last modified: February 15, 2003 9:10 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.409091 Overall Rank: 3084 Comments:
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AmberNicole @ 4.64.147.182
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15-Feb-03/9:09 PM
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Um....intersting.
Hi,
1 spelling error 'schizophrenic' I liked the beginning, and understand now why you liked Parting th Curtain, I didn't find the connection, or else you took a sharp turn, at His Momma.... nice though. I really liked the beginning.
His momma yells.....refers to his childhood of when he was severly abused. It's taking the story of a schizophrenic from the now to his childhood....the progression of the disease.
it was ok...no strong feelings though
why have you won the poemwanker award?
Hi, my name is horus8, you must be, Stupid. It has been a pleasure, but in the end I believe we all know who the true mastermind was, and in the words of Alexander the Great " All that way for this <wipes his sword of blood>...Oh, well, I suppose We're rich now, let's eat."
This rather cleverly combines stupidity, illiteracy and total lack of humour. Since I am in a good humour and feeling generous, I shall rate it 1/10.
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