on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
14 Nov 2002, 7:41 AM
i hate to say it (after all the other comments), but i like this poem. it's a little "exquisite corpse" and cold around the edges, but in its scatterbrained way, it's effective.
on some deleted poem
20 Nov 2002, 8:52 AM
this makes me feel something, but i'll be damned if i know what it is. i like that, and i like it. 8
on some deleted poem
20 Nov 2002, 8:48 AM
oh, strider, put in a little effort and the world will reward you with its
on In the heart there is freedom by mozac
20 Nov 2002, 8:54 AM
this reminds me of the answer to the question no one asked.
on November's Pot Marigolds, Still Blooming by <~>
26 Nov 2002, 12:48 PM
i have an Alusian named Calendula! 8 swastikas!
on two poles are better than one by <~>
26 Nov 2002, 12:46 PM
this is amazing...until the last two stanzas. i think your ire got the better of you and you let the words get away from you a little. knowing you, you probably did it on purpose and i'm missing the point.
on "Why would I need to get in touch with you?" by Limness
20 Nov 2002, 8:44 AM
i give this one two swastikas up! lovely work. 9
on some deleted poem
19 Nov 2002, 6:48 AM
i remebered to vote. were you listening to the Pixies when you wrote this shit? chien andalou?
on Haiku Gymraeg by Nicholas Jones
19 Nov 2002, 6:38 AM
what the fuck is this shit? is someone taking a class in gaelic (is that what this is?) and writing poems from the dictionary? is poetry supposed to convey something to the reader? know why i'm asking?
i can't quite place this style. it's somewhere between jim morrison (yuk) and the surrealists (slightly less horrible). so impersonal, though, that's it's hard to connect with. reminds me of snorting ritalin and talking in circles and writing it down. those were the days.
on Drinker's Haikus 2a and 2b by cacophony
5 Nov 2002, 11:46 AM
i say once you hit 30, you're too old to drink that shit and should move on to scotch. sounds like your stomach's telling you the same thing. nice. 8
on Hells Game by Katie
5 Nov 2002, 11:31 AM
katie, in those same lines, you have two more "where"s to change to "were"s.
on Hells Game by Katie
5 Nov 2002, 6:55 AM
katie's back! there is some nice stuff in here. in the two "You thought you..." lines, you'll want to change the "where"s to "were"s. i like those lines, though. the poem veers from subtle to not so subtle, but it's one of your more solid poems (although what do i know).
on The Gunfighter by deadstar
5 Nov 2002, 7:13 AM
if you've never seen the film "The Gunfighter," you should, then revisit this poem. nothing wrong with the poem, but it could be a little tighter.
on yellow verse by daniella
19 Nov 2002, 6:51 AM
yes...at last...
on The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus
14 Nov 2002, 8:17 AM
if i were Dannara, i wouldn't know how the hell to take this (not that i do anyway).
on some deleted poem
26 Nov 2002, 12:51 PM
no soup for you!
on Ode to the unwanted chip by deadstar
14 Nov 2002, 8:25 AM
oh, lord.
on some deleted poem
5 Nov 2002, 11:29 AM
at least the last stanza is honest (sort of).