on some deleted poem
31 Aug 2004, 9:13 PM
Print this out and bring it by one day, we'll fix all the spelling, then I'll show you something you can put in it.
on Lachrymose by affei09
28 Aug 2004, 1:14 PM
don't know what to think for sure. the style is new to me, and it seems a bit forced in places. Overall a good pome tho'
on A Stitch In Time by Dovina
24 Aug 2004, 7:59 PM
So true. Well done.
on Of Gifts by thepinkbunnyofdoom
23 Aug 2004, 9:17 PM
now this, I like.
on some deleted poem
24 Aug 2004, 7:48 PM
I just started a poem with this thought last night.
on Of Life by thepinkbunnyofdoom
23 Aug 2004, 9:14 PM
Forgetfulness is bliss. By the way <3?
on some deleted poem
23 Aug 2004, 8:55 PM
Very well spoken Bratsy. Fix the last line of the fourth stanza,and stanza six, pain. Just read them slowly before you submit.
on Absolution by andrewjthomas
23 Aug 2004, 9:21 PM
It would seem he found his strength in Catholicism. But it is better to be a true Catholic, than to pretend to be.
on Trust by QuirkyWonder
16 Aug 2004, 10:51 PM
Vote on mine I'll vote on yours!
on Corner of 30th and Tibbs by klosterfobik
16 Aug 2004, 9:56 PM
Punctuation, 0
regret, 6
continuity, 2 {of again and shadows}?
intensity 8.
rewrite. total 6
regret, 6
continuity, 2 {of again and shadows}?
intensity 8.
rewrite. total 6
on I Can't Move On by Sirens_Voice
16 Aug 2004, 10:27 PM
Seems to stop. abruptly. once too many, times. rewrite.
on Sequel by MacFrantic
16 Aug 2004, 10:30 PM
Keep writing about writing,
Have fat women sing,
If the waiters must come
Have them bring more bling bling
Have fat women sing,
If the waiters must come
Have them bring more bling bling
on Guilt Trip by thepinkbunnyofdoom
16 Aug 2004, 10:25 PM
Ya know, I'd like to give this a zero, not because I don't like it, but for the 0's you've given me .. on better things. still, I think the o's are for others to come, but not from me.
on Vows by QuirkyWonder
17 Aug 2004, 7:25 AM
Enjoyable, I can allmost see you behind those walls.
on don't feel by caitydee
16 Aug 2004, 9:48 PM
Damn caity, wasn't worth it at all, was it?
Readit again, out loud, maybe three times.
By the way, I meant the relationship, not the poem.
Readit again, out loud, maybe three times.
By the way, I meant the relationship, not the poem.
on some deleted poem
16 Aug 2004, 9:43 PM
To lose one's wealth is sad indeed,
To lose one's health is more.
But to lose one's soul is such a loss;
That man can restore.
The present only is our own,
To live love, and toil,
With God's will
Place no faith in tomorrow,
For the clock may then be still.
To lose one's health is more.
But to lose one's soul is such a loss;
That man can restore.
The present only is our own,
To live love, and toil,
With God's will
Place no faith in tomorrow,
For the clock may then be still.
on Love Letter by wilco
3 Sep 2004, 10:09 AM
Well done wilco, I really enjoyed reading this one!