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16-Aug-04/9:43 PM |
To lose one's wealth is sad indeed,
To lose one's health is more.
But to lose one's soul is such a loss;
That man can restore.
The present only is our own,
To live love, and toil,
With God's will
Place no faith in tomorrow,
For the clock may then be still.
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| Re: don't feel by caitydee |
16-Aug-04/9:48 PM |
Damn caity, wasn't worth it at all, was it?
Readit again, out loud, maybe three times.
By the way, I meant the relationship, not the poem.
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| Re: Corner of 30th and Tibbs by klosterfobik |
16-Aug-04/9:56 PM |
Punctuation, 0
regret, 6
continuity, 2 {of again and shadows}?
intensity 8.
rewrite. total 6
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| Re: Guilt Trip by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
16-Aug-04/10:25 PM |
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Ya know, I'd like to give this a zero, not because I don't like it, but for the 0's you've given me .. on better things. still, I think the o's are for others to come, but not from me.
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| Re: I Can't Move On by Sirens_Voice |
16-Aug-04/10:27 PM |
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Seems to stop. abruptly. once too many, times. rewrite.
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| Re: Sequel by MacFrantic |
16-Aug-04/10:30 PM |
Keep writing about writing,
Have fat women sing,
If the waiters must come
Have them bring more bling bling
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| Re: Trust by QuirkyWonder |
16-Aug-04/10:51 PM |
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Vote on mine I'll vote on yours!
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| Re: Vows by QuirkyWonder |
17-Aug-04/7:25 AM |
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Enjoyable, I can allmost see you behind those walls.
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| Re: The 80's by wilco |
19-Aug-04/8:35 AM |
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I think I'm real close to what I wanted to be back then, except for the money of course.
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23-Aug-04/8:55 PM |
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Very well spoken Bratsy. Fix the last line of the fourth stanza,and stanza six, pain. Just read them slowly before you submit.
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| Re: Of Life by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
23-Aug-04/9:14 PM |
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Forgetfulness is bliss. By the way <3?
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| Re: Of Gifts by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
23-Aug-04/9:17 PM |
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| Re: Absolution by andrewjthomas |
23-Aug-04/9:21 PM |
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It would seem he found his strength in Catholicism. But it is better to be a true Catholic, than to pretend to be.
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24-Aug-04/7:48 PM |
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I just started a poem with this thought last night.
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| Re: A Stitch In Time by Dovina |
24-Aug-04/7:59 PM |
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| Re: Lachrymose by affei09 |
28-Aug-04/1:14 PM |
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don't know what to think for sure. the style is new to me, and it seems a bit forced in places. Overall a good pome tho'
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
31-Aug-04/9:13 PM |
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Print this out and bring it by one day, we'll fix all the spelling, then I'll show you something you can put in it.
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| Re: Buzzards by rnsbreeze |
1-Sep-04/6:51 AM |
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Now that's what I call hitting the perverbial nail on the head!
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| Re: How many? by rnsbreeze |
1-Sep-04/6:54 AM |
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An inescapable truth. (Unless you believe in incarnation, then it's still inescapable, you just don't know it.)
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| Re: Love Letter by wilco |
3-Sep-04/10:09 AM |
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Well done wilco, I really enjoyed reading this one!
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