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A Stitch In Time

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 20 Aug 2004 · 12 comments

I sewed a stitch in time once, Knitted a piece of yarn past Into yarn present, A morning love Into an afternoon love, A thread from puberty Into the fabric of age, Weaving longer a stylish gown. It saved a lot of time, Recycling old habits, Bending old strings To fit new garments, Saving heartaches, Maybe nine. But the old threads strained, Styles had changed, And where in youthful inexperience, They fit badly, They fit worse In the freedom of age.

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12 comments

[10] Dan garcia-Black 21-Aug-04/7:54 PM Reply
Great last four lines (along with all the rest).
A morning love Into an afternoon love,
("Into one from this afternoon"? Too much love in this poem for my taste.)-10- Anyway it's good without my meddling.
[n/a] Dovina › Dan garcia-Black 22-Aug-04/9:44 AM Reply
Yes, there’s far too much love. We’ve got to scrub most of it away to get a look at what’s under it and what matters. "Into one from this afternoon" is better. Think I’ll use it.
[10] XxRuby_KillsXx 22-Aug-04/11:57 AM Reply
Hey...I didnt rate you..I dont leave comments or rate anyone..but I guess if it should that I rated you a one it must of been my friend. She is the one that reads the comments and replay to them if she wishes. All I do is post my poems. I read a few of them and I though they where good. So heres te ~10~ you deserve not a one. Tell me what peom you got rated a one so I could change that. bye bye always Ruby.
[n/a] Dovina › XxRuby_KillsXx 22-Aug-04/2:47 PM Reply
On August 7, someone using IP 67.180.80.13, the same as you have been using, voted and anonymous 1 on my poem “Los Angeles.” Apparently it was someone else on the same computer. It doesn’t matter, because I care a lot more about comments than about votes. Thanks for the encouraging, though cryptic, words.
[10] Prince of Void 22-Aug-04/1:47 PM Reply
...........Always Beautiful ..........
[n/a] Dovina › Prince of Void 22-Aug-04/2:54 PM Reply
Thank you, kind Prince.
[n/a] klosterfobik 22-Aug-04/8:52 PM Reply
You captured a moment of us all.
Very well wrighten.-9-
[n/a] Dovina › klosterfobik 23-Aug-04/9:09 AM Reply
Don’t we try to make them work? The old habits, I mean – even if they aren’t any good and weren’t based on anything good to begin with. Thanks.
[n/a] sliver 24-Aug-04/7:59 PM Reply
So true. Well done.
[n/a] Dovina › sliver 25-Aug-04/5:16 PM Reply
Been sewing lately? mending maybe? Busting cliches perhaps, like "a stitch in time saves nine."
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 26-Aug-04/2:00 AM Reply
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[10] sir_heff 16-Dec-04/9:41 AM Reply
i like it! -10-