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A Stitch In Time (Free verse) by Dovina I sewed a stitch in time once,
Knitted a piece of yarn past
Into yarn present,
A morning love
Into an afternoon love,
A thread from puberty
Into the fabric of age,
Weaving longer a stylish gown.
It saved a lot of time,
Recycling old habits,
Bending old strings
To fit new garments,
Saving heartaches,
Maybe nine.
But the old threads strained,
Styles had changed,
And where in youthful inexperience,
They fit badly,
They fit worse
In the freedom of age.
Up the ladder:
The Mocking Bird
Down the ladder:
Sarah, Freefalling (twee for AlChemy)
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 8.5
Posted: August 20, 2004 11:40 AM PDT; Last modified: August 20, 2004 11:40 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.75 Overall Rank: 463 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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Hey...I didnt rate you..I dont leave comments or rate anyone..but I guess if it should that I rated you a one it must of been my friend. She is the one that reads the comments and replay to them if she wishes. All I do is post my poems. I read a few of them and I though they where good. So heres te ~10~ you deserve not a one. Tell me what peom you got rated a one so I could change that. bye bye always Ruby.
On August 7, someone using IP 67.180.80.13, the same as you have been using, voted and anonymous 1 on my poem âLos Angeles.â Apparently it was someone else on the same computer. It doesnât matter, because I care a lot more about comments than about votes. Thanks for the encouraging, though cryptic, words.
...........Always Beautiful ..........
Thank you, kind Prince.
You captured a moment of us all.
Very well wrighten.-9-
Donât we try to make them work? The old habits, I mean â even if they arenât any good and werenât based on anything good to begin with. Thanks.
So true. Well done.
Been sewing lately? mending maybe? Busting cliches perhaps, like "a stitch in time saves nine."
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i like it! -10-
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A morning love Into an afternoon love,
("Into one from this afternoon"? Too much love in this poem for my taste.)-10- Anyway it's good without my meddling.