Re: Thereâs A Voice Deep Inside My Head by celticskatermatt1 |
10-Nov-04/11:43 PM |
If this is what you want do say, that's o.k, But re-write, again and again. Where to begin? In the first stanza, using dread, and then beating it 'till it's dead, No. Buy a Thesourus, find a chorus, and next time... try not to bore us. But KEEP WRITING.
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regarding some deleted poem... |
10-Nov-04/11:49 PM |
I would leave the same comment that someone left on my poem 'To My Love'... This probably doesn't mean much except to you and the person you wrote it for. Except, I know, It means so much more, Or at least I thought so at the time. Thanx ED.
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Re: Ebony shadow by Twiggy77 |
10-Nov-04/11:57 PM |
The shadow of THIS mortal CONSTANTLY questions my fate, But it's all about morals anyway! Right?
A few miscpewings. elliminate the dash between mime artist. Other than that???
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Re: Ebony shadow by Twiggy77 |
11-Nov-04/12:00 AM |
O.K. NOW I see that yer a Brit, Haven't voted, or commented on anything. read read read. comment, visit, learn. Welcome.
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Re: Ode to a Friend by tadpole |
2-Feb-05/8:29 AM |
Must be a terrible thirst!
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Re: Life by AmberDawn |
2-Feb-05/8:34 AM |
Some misspelling, Your metre is off also. Just a word or two omitted or added in places may help some.While I admit compromise does often help, there are times when you absolutely cannot give on an issue.
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regarding some deleted poem... |
2-Feb-05/8:43 AM |
I guess you're learning that the people here don't like this kind of stuff. Hoping the title will shield you?
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Re: A love apple's just a tomato (edit of "Uprooting") by fevriere |
2-Feb-05/8:45 AM |
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Re: Call of the Moon by arduinn |
2-Feb-05/2:38 PM |
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Re: Weary by erin35 |
7-Feb-05/10:26 PM |
Yea, I feel it too. What can ya' do?
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Re: Provision by erin35 |
7-Feb-05/10:29 PM |
Trapped in the same circle as the rest of us, I see.
Welome to the other side of humanity.
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Re: Back Off by erin35 |
7-Feb-05/10:32 PM |
This one just feels kind of stilted, for lack of a better word. Maybe choppy, no. well, I ramble. Perhaps just a bit smoother? Or... maybe it's just me, what the hell do I know.
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Re: The Downfall of a Pagan Man by somemorepoetry |
7-Feb-05/10:41 PM |
I am at a loss for words. I love the way you mixed it all up, And painted such a picture.
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Re: Epitaph of Innocence by woodstock20000 |
9-Feb-05/10:11 PM |
I would tend to agree, We are losing our sense of morality
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regarding some deleted poem... |
9-Feb-05/10:14 PM |
lies this need? Your poetry has improved quite a bit, I really liked this one.
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Re: a study in blossoms and beauty by oneglove |
14-Feb-05/11:15 PM |
You seemed to be chasing your tail for a bit, But really quite well written. Me likey
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Re: Loves Struggle by hummers86 |
20-Feb-05/5:59 PM |
Are you decomposing in that lye in your bed?
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Re: Gabriel by tadpole |
14-Mar-05/7:49 PM |
A good image, I just like the way it sounds.
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regarding some deleted poem... |
25-Mar-05/9:44 AM |
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Re: Arab Shepherd (a belief poem for Dovina) by zodiac |
6-Apr-05/10:42 PM |
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