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25-Apr-05/1:45 PM |
CAn he brew me a cure for gout? This sucks.
How's it been goin, Old man?
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Re: Censor by nentwined |
28-Apr-05/12:08 PM |
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28-Apr-05/12:31 PM |
It's funny how everyone seems to know what your needs are more than you do. I can see people cringe when they think I am going to recite one of my poems. Friends, family, it doesn't matter. I guess that's why most of us are here, looking for acceptance.
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28-Apr-05/12:41 PM |
I'm glad you wrote in that last stanza, I was going to chew you out! Nice prayer. Why don't you move next to me so I can be that neighbor who's prayers are answered.
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Re: Untitled by http://mulberryfairy |
28-Apr-05/7:50 PM |
And with that he's gone. Now you're changing sides?
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Re: FREAKIN by celticskatermatt1 |
28-Apr-05/7:52 PM |
Only because you misspelled cello
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Re: The promise by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
28-Apr-05/7:54 PM |
The first stanza reminds me of my friend Skip, "Stay out of my mind, there's things in there i don't want you to know." Good visuals.
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Re: Hanging Gallows by Hadasl |
28-Apr-05/7:57 PM |
What does Zodiac know? I like it.
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Re: The Resilient Woman by Joe-joe |
28-Apr-05/8:02 PM |
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Re: Returning by Dovina |
28-Apr-05/8:12 PM |
If only more of us would open the doors of our minds.
I enjoyed the first stanza very much.The rest wasn't bad, ...
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Re: Wherever the Wind Will Blow by nothingtoanyone |
29-Apr-05/3:14 PM |
did you mean relinquish? also wherever is one word, and nature's. grammer and punctuation is important for a writer, yes?
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Re: Just a Poem by Damien |
29-Apr-05/3:17 PM |
A well made point, even if it did sound a bit forced.
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Re: Sins of convenience by sunset sky |
29-Apr-05/3:20 PM |
Damn, such violent tendencies in a poet, whatever shall we do?
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Re: The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson |
2-May-05/9:30 PM |
Well, hello. Nice to meet you. I just finished losing myself into a very blue canvas,really. I have only two words for you. Damn... Wow.
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Re: The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson |
2-May-05/9:31 PM |
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Re: Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT |
26-May-05/8:45 PM |
I think perhaps the coroner would be better suited to clean up this mess.
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Re: Lower than low by nicole081083 |
26-May-05/8:48 PM |
I would say 'that heaven let me in' in the first stanza. See how it flows better that way? A few other spots that seem to bog down a bit. A positive message, but I think you need repentance, also, for that forgiveness.
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Re: A backsliders struggle by nicole081083 |
26-May-05/8:51 PM |
I really liked this, mostly because it sounds like something I would have written.I especially like the part about forgetting your song. superb..
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26-May-05/9:19 PM |
I really can't tell you how much I like this. Vivid, I think, is the word for the way this struck me. A painting of both light and dark. Inspiring.
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regarding some deleted poem... |
19-Jun-05/9:31 PM |
So, why would you feel the need to mark all of my poems with a zero? It just seems out of charachter for you old timer. Really, I want to know!
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