Re: Just-Average-Zongs-Zung by tralala42001	4-Jan-04/9:38 AM
Hmmm. Your moniker suggests something juvenile. Your topics don't. I would suggest combining this with the other (8 minutes). The good morning simply needs more material. Wear your safety belt. It can be a rough ride around these parts.
Re: a comment on The wise by richa	3-Jan-04/2:49 PM
The invalidity of assuming that invalids are invalid.
Re: a comment on The wise by richa	3-Jan-04/2:26 PM
"...and that there's no such thing as a wrong opinion, even if it it wrong." Hmmmmm. Nope. I'm gonna leave it alone.
Re: a comment on The wise by richa	3-Jan-04/12:54 PM
How can you offer me points, then? Must be so I can make a fool of myself for your entertainment. Standard issue. And I fell for it. swell.
Re: The wise by richa	3-Jan-04/12:52 PM
Liked the first run. This is better though.
Re: a comment on The wise by richa	3-Jan-04/6:11 AM
Well? How'd I do? Backhand me if you must. Just let me know. thanks.
Re: Haikus for Nentwined by horus8	3-Jan-04/5:52 AM
Here here! And where is he these days? And his pops.
Re: O Death by lastobelus	2-Jan-04/12:41 PM
I hope this doesn't get missed. I'm gonna take a few reads before I vote.
Re: Belabourin' Jack by middenHeap	2-Jan-04/12:38 PM
Yup. That's the way the nut sac singes.
Re: Pawn by Blindpoetry	2-Jan-04/6:05 AM
Also, take the time to read comments on other poems you read. If something a writer said sparks your interest, follow it. The best part of poemranker is not necessarily the most recent poems posted. Roam the back halls. Study the graffiti. no vote
Re: a comment on Just For Two by Blindpoetry	2-Jan-04/5:57 AM
Extra points for knowing what a Manatee is. Almost a high school grad, eh? look around. Write better. This is beneath your ability.
Re: Just For Two by Blindpoetry	1-Jan-04/5:08 PM
Sharp. like a Manatee.
Re: How to spend New Years in denial by Bachus	1-Jan-04/5:06 PM
Were Roman baths an early version of ethnic cleansing?
Re: The burlesque circus clown [revised] by Don-Quixote	31-Dec-03/6:44 AM
Whew. I thought I was the only buffon here. ha! Needs tweaks. Verbalize with volume and you'll find them. high nines.
Re: The Vagabond by Caducus	31-Dec-03/6:32 AM
Something for a nothing in everyones' nowhere. Brilliant. Small nits. I would make the leaves and wind whos, they are accompanyment to the man. I don't like the duplicitous rain, unless it has specific meaning, explain? (Crib)is slang for house in America find something else please. I'm totally lost with the crownings. Sorry. "Jettison of the richer man" also brilliant. And I liked the use of mackintosh. I don't mind going to the dictionary at all. Even for this small stuff, the gross of it is velly goot, yah.
Re: a comment on Anvil man by INTRANSIT	31-Dec-03/6:18 AM
Thank you sir. I will be visiting yours, post haste. In the mean time, (Dale) can be found at http://poemranker.com/jsp?id=25305
Re: a comment on Anvil man by INTRANSIT	30-Dec-03/11:08 AM
Opinionated or not, I tend to agree with you. I still have the bad habit of rushing into posting without that one-last-read-through. Slowing down is an on and off problem for me. I need to MAKE time for this so I can think and listen more.
Re: a comment on The wise by richa	30-Dec-03/10:57 AM
Thank you for your patience, -=Dark_Angel=-. I had family over and saw them off this morning. Also, thank you for this challenge and the opportunity to stretch myself. Here goes. Still taking the title into consideration, I think the poem is a variation on the "sands of time " theme with the writer suggesting the reader consider the theme from an infirm persons point(assumed). The rock (the decrepit person)is aware and at a point where they are comfortable with knowing that death is near (the blowing wind). This however goes against "the uneven lines of every faked smile", which suggests the opposite. The "cabbage white butterfly" is not actually a butterfly. It is a metaphor for what a short span of life (healthy) people have and that when we "have" our life (the butterfly) we also (get some of it on ourselves) through the events of our lives the "cabbage" which leaves marks behind (the white powder) which is left behind from white butterflies and by cabbage.The poem could have stated another type of butterfly, one that left a dark or black powder, however, I believe the poet chose white for a (pure) image. White traditionally represents purity. Or a life that has not yet been (scarred) by time. I have not actually seen white cabbage. This does not mean that white cabbage does not exist. The residue is what the poet was actually wanting, I believe. The poem also suggests that decrepit people have difficulty with speech at some point. Which makes it difficult for a healthy person to communicate with, and understand, someone of failing health. There is still much more that i havn't touched on. Thank you for forcing me to slow down and take a fine toothed comb to Mr. Richards' poem. It has revealed many things to me. I have unfortunately lost my secondary view in this process. If it returns, I will share. I am not so concerned with getting the marks as I am in learning from this experience. Feel free to challenge me again. If there is more to discuss here, By all means, E-mail me.
Re: a comment on The wise by richa	29-Dec-03/5:08 PM
It has two meanings, that I can see.
Re: The wise by richa	29-Dec-03/3:33 PM
of course? off course? When I tie in the title , it works. I think you can shuffle the 3rd stanza and lose the ( of course). Beautiful. as if I had expected less.