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O Death (Free verse) by lastobelus
O Death oh Death, I had a dream of you walking, angry and cold in your guncotton trousers, your terror frieze hair— and why are you so alone? where have all your companions gone? (stolen one by one from under the apple sun) and oh, Death-- she was so so sweet, the smiling doll you dreamed of— will you wake her, will you take her, will you make her tremble eyes wide? Death ha, ha Death. I know you, I know your whisky nights and your slow empty days -- where are all the castles & cabins of your good friends? too dark & cold, now, for you to visit once more? Did you know, when you took them, how you would miss their light? When you came with your righteous shroud, with your pine box night? you've become quicker & slicker with your bone bone hand you've become faster, almost careless with your caress— will you ever stop? will you ever find someone who can last?

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.75
Weighted score: 4.970199
Overall Rank: 8483
Posted: January 2, 2004 10:38 AM PST; Last modified: January 2, 2004 10:38 AM PST
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[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.252.72 | 2-Jan-04/12:41 PM | Reply
I hope this doesn't get missed. I'm gonna take a few reads before I vote.
[9] richa @ 81.178.242.200 | 2-Jan-04/12:43 PM | Reply
The parenthesesed part is pointless.

And the poem is kind of messy. Other than that very good.
[n/a] lastobelus @ 217.226.20.245 > richa | 2-Jan-04/7:02 PM | Reply
Oooh COOL, my poem is JUST LIKE SEX. The parenting part is pointless, it's kind of messy, and other than that very good.

:)
Thank you.
[2] little_big_nose @ 216.207.134.233 | 2-Jan-04/6:45 PM | Reply
remember me, im the dude who wrote 'where was god', well it's my quite firm belife that There is no god to question, he doesn't exist...i bet you would love to know that i work at a Planned Parenthood office, If you liked that one, read this
New commandments
Your extinct god
Will bow down before me and call himself a fraud
And tell your poor abused children that I will end the animosity
I will be the one to set them free
The new ten commandments go as follows
He who prays, also wallows
Tho shalt not commit a crime
To buy your extinct god time
Tho shall destroy all idols
Tho shall burn every bible
Tho shall dine in thy own mercy
As soon as they can kill me
Tho shall sin in my name
And tho shall treat life as a game
Tho shalt not rape thy mother
Tho shalt not love thy brother
For the final preparation
To assure the restoration
Tho shall sing for satan
To give back all you have taken
[n/a] lastobelus @ 217.226.20.245 > little_big_nose | 2-Jan-04/6:55 PM | Reply
dude, if that was coherent it would probably be blasphemous. You should watch that; I heard they were going to start sending blasphemers to Faith-Based Rehabilitiation Kamps. I mean Camps.

You should relax. Don't take life so seriously. Think of it as a big game of Paintball. But, you know, SINGLE-SHOT Paintball. Pick a target and paintball it. None of this 3000 round hoppers & compressed air tanks on the back and running out into the middle of the field and hosing everything with an incoherent splatter of pink paint shit. Sheesh. That's just silly.
[8] AnotherNothing @ 65.73.160.59 > lastobelus | 21-Jan-04/5:12 PM | Reply
But that is life, running into the middle of a field and being hosed down by 3000 rounds of pink paint.
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