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29-Nov-02/4:56 PM |
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But gee, wallowing in self pity is so much fun! I would know.
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| Re: No One Cares by Quarton |
29-Nov-02/4:58 PM |
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30-Nov-02/7:56 AM |
Ok, here's what I woul do. S-2, try to get line 4 to rhyme. Again,
skin, clicking, you've got a pattern there and rhyming s-2 might help the flow a little more.
Just my thoughts. Vote on hold.
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30-Nov-02/8:05 AM |
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L-10 "else I will catch them peripherally" maybe?
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30-Nov-02/8:07 AM |
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I agree with bachus. Influenced by Whitman?
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| Re: There is no Happy Hour in Bakersfield, Ca. by horus8 |
2-Dec-02/4:13 PM |
pouring it on,are we? Fine job too!
do it again!
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2-Dec-02/4:20 PM |
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well sweetie,glad you're still here. damnit! don't do that again. that's my gig.8 missed Ya!
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2-Dec-02/4:28 PM |
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since i'm shy on tech, i'll score on content. This rocks.
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| Re: she said by Bill Z Bub |
3-Dec-02/3:52 PM |
Yes, the title gives too much away.
Love the beat! good job devil man.
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| Re: Silence by Cha no Onna |
3-Dec-02/4:13 PM |
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Z is big help. always. welcome,and nice entry work too.
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3-Dec-02/4:17 PM |
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I'm not deeply religious so I must think on this awhile. I like it though.
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| Re: want of warmth by <~> |
4-Dec-02/4:30 AM |
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another one of your fab 2 way haiku
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| Re: Poem For Times Such As These by Nicholas Jones |
4-Dec-02/4:37 AM |
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ok then, how about this: thanks foor fucking up my only form of escapism! or, hows about we all ship over to iraq and put ourselves in the line of fire for a "good cause" instead of writing poetry that accomplishes NOTHING!!
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| Re: nothing, as today by <~> |
4-Dec-02/4:41 AM |
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I'd say you were rightfully movedd.
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| Re: Missing the In-Between by <~> |
9-Dec-02/10:27 AM |
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Somehow I can't imagine you ever being lonely.
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9-Dec-02/1:03 PM |
I was just thinking the other day:
How do slums start? Then I answered: Overcharging real estate owners.
And the band plays on....
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9-Dec-02/1:12 PM |
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That's one bad case of c/t man. It seems to be affecting your brain.
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| Re: Walter Cronkite by UnityMitford |
9-Dec-02/1:14 PM |
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Maybe a month of his paycheck? I like anything that stabs.
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| Re: triple suicide server line by Bill Z Bub |
9-Dec-02/1:18 PM |
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I've been through two suicides in my life now.(not me)I'm hardening to them quickly. They're sad and selfish. nothing more. funny write.
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| Re: How the Mighty Fall by jdsnyd |
9-Dec-02/1:21 PM |
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No arguements here. Keep the left door shut.
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