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Free verse № 29235

How the Mighty Fall

Member since 2002 · Posted 9 Dec 2002 · Edited 10 Dec 2002 · 6 comments

In our early years before illumination you were the self-appointed minister of day to day essence. A station you savored and I gladly consented. In my eyes your word was truth, stirring poetry in all you touched. Time, a prowling harbinger of wisdom, crept into your domain, infecting your grandeur, breeding questions and doubt. Your ardent defense was in the end flawed and dauntingly human. Jaded sorrow swelled as your fallibility lay naked in the gleam of reason. Those who gazed, you banished from your fading realm. Left with a dwindling orb of true believers. These days, I stand on the fringe of your ashen ruins grieving your fall, and in a sense my own. Your scripture is now read like a tabloid and discarded, thrown into obscure Delphian pools, without a ripple.

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[8] Bill Z Bub 9-Dec-02/11:20 AM Reply
Despite your high-falutin' words, I like it. Yup. I read it aloud and it sounds good to me. Or do I just love my own voice? Who knows.
So olympian, I admire. Now I go back to the cthonic.
[n/a] jdsnyd › Bill Z Bub 9-Dec-02/12:18 PM Reply
Thanks Bill, I think I'll change "pestiferous", that never really sat well with me anyway.
[8] INTRANSIT 9-Dec-02/1:21 PM Reply
No arguements here. Keep the left door shut.
[10] horus8 9-Dec-02/10:13 PM Reply
this felt like conan pushing that wheel and making that huge rut with his little boy legs...but then cut too..arnold yes! 10.
[3] god'swife 9-Dec-02/11:38 PM Reply
There is too much butterfrosting on this cake, it makes my teeth hurt. "your mind's Olympus"? Don't you think that's a little far-fetched?
[n/a] jdsnyd › god'swife 10-Dec-02/5:15 AM Reply
yes, it is far-fetched, it was meant to be sarcastic, but maybe that isn't working. I'll try something else. Thanks for your comments GW and horus8.