on Liar by Babigurly69
8 Jun 2003, 6:26 PM
I've held back long enough. Another fresh faced danger teen has arrived. INCOMING!!!!
on some deleted poem
9 Jun 2003, 6:10 AM
Do yourself a favor, and stop with the b.s.. Just focus on your writing skills and earn the respect you want. I had to. and I'm not done yet, either. Just a note. If I think a poem is 5 or less, I won't score it.
on sharkmouth by Bill Z Bub
9 Jun 2003, 6:20 AM
I had Zebra rubbers on my headgear. I hated braces.
on some deleted poem
10 Jun 2003, 3:35 PM
LIFT THAT BARGE!!!! TOTE THAT BALE!!!!
on Roadside Testimony by groovenmove
10 Jun 2003, 3:56 PM
Nice fro, bro. Now mash yer motor.
on some deleted poem
11 Jun 2003, 1:03 PM
are you studying a specific style of poetry? feels like it. I do like your writing though.
on some deleted poem
12 Jun 2003, 11:53 AM
Maybe, nope, you covered that too. I always make sure there are plenty of portable janitors available.
on some deleted poem
12 Jun 2003, 11:55 AM
3rd to 2nd person?
on Coloured waifs home by horus8
12 Jun 2003, 11:59 AM
right on the head.
on Ga-go, Part two of that same play, the suspensefull climax. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
12 Jun 2003, 12:50 PM
really? no, rely. Anywho, I'll bare my balls that you may kick them, firmedly. go for the hook. open with the fencing scene, then backtrack to the birthday party. I am jealous. I am blonde. i am erect? was not was. 10 because you put FORT into this. yes. encore.
on some deleted poem
12 Jun 2003, 12:58 PM
drop the last line.
on Warlocks by <{Baba^Yaga}>
12 Jun 2003, 1:04 PM
hazards coming back to hazard you.
on some deleted poem
12 Jun 2003, 2:01 PM
i might also go for (then) instead of (the). My apologies,btw. didn't read your file first.
on How I fuck Freud off in the shower by horus8
12 Jun 2003, 6:09 PM
froot loop. pimple is correct though.
on Something You'll never understand by thepinkbunnyofdoom
12 Jun 2003, 6:11 PM
an olympic swimmer next to the rope lane divider?
on some deleted poem
12 Jun 2003, 6:19 PM
what the hell is all that nonsense on yer p/r homepage?
do you really believe that? I don't.
do you really believe that? I don't.
on How I fuck Freud off in the shower by horus8
12 Jun 2003, 6:33 PM
am I gay if I associate with the lot of ya?
on Lake Pyramid's Secret by Bachus
12 Jun 2003, 6:43 PM
I remember when I used to do that.lol.
on some deleted poem
12 Jun 2003, 6:50 PM
yes this brings it much closer. the reader is not distracted as much I think.
on Dirge by Nicholas Jones
13 Jun 2003, 8:01 AM
battling the atrophy of a learned response culture.