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26-Sep-03/1:24 PM |
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stab...and twist and stab...and twist2-3-4-
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
29-Sep-03/3:16 PM |
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Sometimes more IS better. I liked the 1st version, but this was worth the effort. yes.
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| Re: EGG by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
29-Sep-03/3:37 PM |
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I think your caps should be in the middle of line three, giving it somewhat of an arc. Like a small girl grossed out and sqealing. funny funny funny.
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| Re: War Grave by Caducus |
29-Sep-03/3:43 PM |
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How many years have we been on this planet? And we've still learned nothing. still doing the same ol' same ol'. What's taking Jesu so damned long? Held up in a fast food line no doubt. Maybe just... held up?
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29-Sep-03/3:47 PM |
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You should write horror films. This scared me.
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| Re: Timber! by Shardik |
29-Sep-03/6:12 PM |
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Here's a joke for you: knawk knawk....
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| Re: the meeting by richa |
30-Sep-03/8:28 PM |
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Something tells me this is just right. yes, yes. Somehow I get this and it works. Excellent.
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| Re: Afraid by Brittanyy |
1-Oct-03/6:52 PM |
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What happened to Gwen? If I may ask.
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| Re: whimsicals by nentwined |
1-Oct-03/6:58 PM |
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| Re: Manila by poetandknowit |
2-Oct-03/6:37 AM |
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Still angry children dump 1s. Good to see you drop by from time to time. This one has inspired me to try something new. details. ha! imagine that.
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2-Oct-03/6:41 AM |
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what am I supposed to say to this? good poem? I find no faults or errors. bleh. 9 I'm guessing you probably have something about it (you) don't like.
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2-Oct-03/6:43 AM |
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hard to follow. Ithink there may be more than 2 people involved here. sounds war-like.
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2-Oct-03/7:04 AM |
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Obviously, you (read) poetry. I can only imagine where my poetry would go if I read more poetry. gah. This is well thought out. I can take a lesson here.
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2-Oct-03/7:10 AM |
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and my lesson is creativity when it comes to colors. apricot blush, neopolitan ice cream. excellent.
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2-Oct-03/7:40 AM |
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another new underground quality poet.
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| Re: the way things are goin' by irishfolksuicide |
2-Oct-03/7:42 AM |
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bull moo- seems a bit comical. good thought provoker.
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2-Oct-03/7:45 AM |
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not necessarily. the limerick flip is something new. there's an underlying tension between the van driver and the woman. rewrite this and smoothe the rhythm.
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| Re: A London Cafe by mrpresident |
2-Oct-03/7:49 AM |
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| Re: angst by nentwined |
2-Oct-03/6:26 PM |
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need another drum of coffee/espresso/NOS?
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2-Oct-03/6:28 PM |
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well, gee. what happened to you?
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