on some deleted poem
26 Sep 2003, 1:24 PM
stab...and twist and stab...and twist2-3-4-
on some deleted poem
29 Sep 2003, 3:16 PM
Sometimes more IS better. I liked the 1st version, but this was worth the effort. yes.
on EGG by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
29 Sep 2003, 3:37 PM
I think your caps should be in the middle of line three, giving it somewhat of an arc. Like a small girl grossed out and sqealing. funny funny funny.
on some deleted poem
29 Sep 2003, 3:47 PM
You should write horror films. This scared me.
on the meeting by richa
30 Sep 2003, 8:28 PM
Something tells me this is just right. yes, yes. Somehow I get this and it works. Excellent.
on whimsicals by nentwined
1 Oct 2003, 6:58 PM
whip-crackin' good.
on Manila by poetandknowit
2 Oct 2003, 6:37 AM
Still angry children dump 1s. Good to see you drop by from time to time. This one has inspired me to try something new. details. ha! imagine that.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 6:41 AM
what am I supposed to say to this? good poem? I find no faults or errors. bleh. 9 I'm guessing you probably have something about it (you) don't like.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 6:43 AM
hard to follow. Ithink there may be more than 2 people involved here. sounds war-like.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 7:04 AM
Obviously, you (read) poetry. I can only imagine where my poetry would go if I read more poetry. gah. This is well thought out. I can take a lesson here.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 7:10 AM
and my lesson is creativity when it comes to colors. apricot blush, neopolitan ice cream. excellent.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 7:40 AM
another new underground quality poet.
on the way things are goin' by irishfolksuicide
2 Oct 2003, 7:42 AM
bull moo- seems a bit comical. good thought provoker.
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 7:45 AM
not necessarily. the limerick flip is something new. there's an underlying tension between the van driver and the woman. rewrite this and smoothe the rhythm.
on A London Cafe by mrpresident
2 Oct 2003, 7:49 AM
a bird in the hand....
on some deleted poem
2 Oct 2003, 6:28 PM
well, gee. what happened to you?