on Summer by Dovina
22 Jul 2004, 11:02 AM
love the cadence.
on some deleted poem
25 Jul 2004, 6:35 AM
I have no problem with forms and I like this very much.
Thanks for the intro.
Thanks for the intro.
on some deleted poem
25 Jul 2004, 7:01 PM
Excellent.
on Broken Sonnet by Sasha
24 Jul 2004, 7:11 PM
This is:
A: A practice in innovation?
B: A practice at sonnets. (Doubtfully needed)
C: A practice in detais.
My unsuredness begets you a rank score.
A: A practice in innovation?
B: A practice at sonnets. (Doubtfully needed)
C: A practice in detais.
My unsuredness begets you a rank score.
on peanut butter sandwiches on a hot summer day by w~* ATHENA *~w
25 Jul 2004, 6:22 AM
If this means what I think it does, sad, very sad. Good poem though
on some deleted poem
24 Jul 2004, 2:57 PM
Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeegggggggggggg!
on Respect on a Quiet Hillside by Dovina
24 Jul 2004, 3:05 PM
They did "it"? I think I get this but, I think it can be done better. Lines one and two are kind of telling, and for my own edification, why grandmums?
on Blobby Food** by MR Blobby
24 Jul 2004, 3:10 PM
I have to give you a compliment. Consistency.
on An Ode To Dark Angel, Private Investigator by tolstoyleo
24 Jul 2004, 3:22 PM
Still, spot on.
on Terrorism Clean Up In Isle Three by Bachus
23 Jul 2004, 6:46 AM
To steal from U-2: " Throw a stone and hit someone guilty"
on some deleted poem
23 Jul 2004, 6:49 AM
Count Chocula? what?
on some deleted poem
22 Jul 2004, 10:14 AM
Drop the 99 bottles line.
I dunno on this one. Later perhaps.
I dunno on this one. Later perhaps.
on some deleted poem
22 Jul 2004, 9:28 AM
I didn't think you could lose the "interpretive powers"
but it works. Perfect. When will dessert be ready?
but it works. Perfect. When will dessert be ready?
on some deleted poem
22 Jul 2004, 9:32 AM
Painfully delicious.
on The Two Temperaments of Man by dougsoderstrom
21 Jul 2004, 8:39 AM
I don't have these problems. I am a fence rider.
on some deleted poem
21 Jul 2004, 2:29 PM
What/who did this to you? My god.
on some deleted poem
21 Jul 2004, 5:43 AM
Interesting picture. Technically: Heavy/oppressive seems redundant and a little cliche. Drop the "but not exactly" again, redundnt against almost laughing.
Finally, -up in- upon may be better. Something about the storm and the village traders having a connection.
Eeees goot.
Finally, -up in- upon may be better. Something about the storm and the village traders having a connection.
Eeees goot.
on Southern Mississippii Standstill by wilco
20 Jul 2004, 6:18 AM
don't like cave-ins. Still, enjoyable.
on Old Friends by sliver
20 Jul 2004, 8:09 AM
Well! Obviously you no longer need my help. Fine work.