| Re: Southern Mississippii Standstill by wilco |
20-Jul-04/6:18 AM |
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don't like cave-ins. Still, enjoyable.
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| Re: Old Friends by sliver |
20-Jul-04/8:09 AM |
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Well! Obviously you no longer need my help. Fine work.
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21-Jul-04/5:43 AM |
Interesting picture. Technically: Heavy/oppressive seems redundant and a little cliche. Drop the "but not exactly" again, redundnt against almost laughing.
Finally, -up in- upon may be better. Something about the storm and the village traders having a connection.
Eeees goot.
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| Re: The Two Temperaments of Man by dougsoderstrom |
21-Jul-04/8:39 AM |
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I don't have these problems. I am a fence rider.
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21-Jul-04/2:29 PM |
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What/who did this to you? My god.
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22-Jul-04/9:28 AM |
I didn't think you could lose the "interpretive powers"
but it works. Perfect. When will dessert be ready?
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22-Jul-04/9:32 AM |
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22-Jul-04/10:14 AM |
Drop the 99 bottles line.
I dunno on this one. Later perhaps.
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| Re: Summer by Dovina |
22-Jul-04/11:02 AM |
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| Re: Terrorism Clean Up In Isle Three by Bachus |
23-Jul-04/6:46 AM |
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To steal from U-2: " Throw a stone and hit someone guilty"
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23-Jul-04/6:49 AM |
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24-Jul-04/2:57 PM |
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Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeegggggggggggg!
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| Re: Respect on a Quiet Hillside by Dovina |
24-Jul-04/3:05 PM |
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They did "it"? I think I get this but, I think it can be done better. Lines one and two are kind of telling, and for my own edification, why grandmums?
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| Re: Blobby Food** by MR Blobby |
24-Jul-04/3:10 PM |
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I have to give you a compliment. Consistency.
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| Re: An Ode To Dark Angel, Private Investigator by tolstoyleo |
24-Jul-04/3:22 PM |
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| Re: Sorry by shit |
24-Jul-04/7:08 PM |
This dog is rooting. I smell a deeply buried truffle.
Do not become a fungus.
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| Re: Broken Sonnet by Sasha |
24-Jul-04/7:11 PM |
This is:
A: A practice in innovation?
B: A practice at sonnets. (Doubtfully needed)
C: A practice in detais.
My unsuredness begets you a rank score.
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| Re: peanut butter sandwiches on a hot summer day by w~* ATHENA *~w |
25-Jul-04/6:22 AM |
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If this means what I think it does, sad, very sad. Good poem though
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25-Jul-04/6:35 AM |
I have no problem with forms and I like this very much.
Thanks for the intro.
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