| Re: Provacation by J.B. Manning |
15-Mar-07/10:24 AM |
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Rambling and grating at the same time. Congratulations.
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| Re: Memories by RION12 |
8-Apr-07/8:54 AM |
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Oh, poor you, whiny baby. Look, this poem is rambly and boring with no metaphor, poor rythm and I think you break the sympathetic contract in your first two lines. Remember to show, don't tell.
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| Re: All Meta-Verse Shall be Deleted, it is Poison by middenHeap |
8-Apr-07/8:56 AM |
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Hmm, I really like your title.
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| Re: Sometimes by pinay_miss_azn |
8-Apr-07/8:58 AM |
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Boo hoo. This is a pimple poem. If you read your poetry to others, no wonder you have no friends.
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| Re: Good-Bye by RION12 |
8-Apr-07/9:00 AM |
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I get the feeling I've read this someplace before; I realize it's because it's the most un-original poem of all time.
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| Re: Chemistry by <Wankster> |
25-Apr-07/5:58 PM |
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Bleugh. No wonder girls don't like you all that much.
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| Re: I Wonder If by ToMuchPain04 |
26-Apr-07/4:19 PM |
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This is horrible and pimply. You've broken the sympathetic contract in the second line and you resort to tired cliches.
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| Re: Mixed Feelings by PunkyPanda |
26-Apr-07/4:22 PM |
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spelling mistakes and cliches totally ruin an already mediocre piece.
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| Re: My Pain 2004 by ToMuchPain04 |
26-Apr-07/4:23 PM |
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cliched rhymes and uncapitalized i's make this seem puerile and just... bad.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
26-Apr-07/4:26 PM |
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You're obsessed with your wife's breasts, aren't you? I like the first four lines.
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| Re: Voices Within by DJCopasetic |
26-Apr-07/4:28 PM |
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cliches and easy rhymes - bad news for any poem, I'm afraid.
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| Re: Death by Highschool_Poem_Girl |
26-Apr-07/4:29 PM |
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Well, your poetry would make anybody feel like that.
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| Re: Metaphorically Challenged by Enkidu |
26-Apr-07/4:31 PM |
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This is very funny and creative.
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| Re: A Pen Named Ed by Enkidu |
26-Apr-07/6:53 PM |
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| Re: The Way by Highschool_Poem_Girl |
26-Apr-07/6:57 PM |
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| Re: Evening by Enkidu |
30-Apr-07/3:13 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
6-May-07/10:17 AM |
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Very clever. I quite like it.
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| Re: Neil Simon is Living in My Lunula by MacFrantic |
22-Jul-07/9:10 AM |
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I like the last stanza; the rest is a bit weak
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| Re: Reality by Sirens_Voice |
22-Jul-07/9:15 AM |
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Wow, shut up already. This drags on and on and on, with no point...
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| Re: Operation Candy Apple Tango by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
22-Jul-07/9:30 AM |
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Very funny and cute. I like.
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