regarding some deleted poem...	11-May-02/12:22 PM
The brave attempt at the integration of onomatopoeia should be applauded here, even if the results aren't as optimal as they could be. I'm not sure what you mean by the last line of the first stanza. The the sentiment of the whole piece is horribly clich?. I'd like to be more polite about it, but this has certainly been done to death, this idea. I do realize that this is the crux of the piece, and so I'd recommend finding a different take on the sentiment expressed, or just scrap the piece altogether.
Re: silence of the sky by david	13-Aug-02/11:35 PM
Curious that you should mention David Hume; I recently (re-)read his essay 'Of the Standard of Good Taste'. He was a smart cookie, but as for the nonsense of him being the greatest philosopher to have written in the English language, it's a big stretch IMO.
Re: constructed word poem #6 by david	26-Aug-02/12:05 PM
I can imagine it would. You don't necessarily have to audibly respond to something in order to have hesitation. Can someone not hesitate to commit an action (conceivably, when there's nobody around to talk to)?
Re: MotherF*ckers Who Fuck Above/Two Story Apartment by JoyLuck	4-Jul-03/1:14 PM
A wonderful piece in the tradition of concrete and typographical poetry. Well done.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Jul-03/1:20 PM
Aside from the sugary-sweet sentiment and the reminders of Celine Dion songs, it's certainly well-crafted from a technical standpoint. You haven't had to sacrifice diction for the rhyming scheme, and the metre is well-chosen and well-maintained. All in all, not a bad ditty.
Re: I am talented & good looking damnit! by <{Baba^Yaga}>	4-Jul-03/1:28 PM
The repetition in this piece is delightful and well-crafted. There are certainly many cases of repetition ruining a poem, but this certainly isn't one of them.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Jul-03/1:31 PM
Technically inept. Seeing as how it's a piece with no real intent or content, I think it ought to be rated in a similar fashion.
Re: Killbirds by <{Baba^Yaga}>	4-Jul-03/1:38 PM
I'm inclined to give a higher rating, if only because vilanelles are so difficult to write well. You've taken to the structure, and the narrative flow of the piece is intriguing.
Re: My last ever poemranker transmission by King Abdullah II	4-Jul-03/3:46 PM
I'm reminded of how Aristotle once said that man, like elephants and bees, are inherently political animals.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Jul-03/3:49 PM
I'm sorry, what? Can you speak a little louder, please? I had something pointless in my ear.
Re: missing time by Bill Z Bub	4-Jul-03/8:17 PM
The diction is mellifluous. I am particularly struck by the enjambment and how it seems to contribute to the overall feeling of how well-crafted the piece is. The only thing I take issue with is the question posed in the ninth stanza. While the diction and intent match, it seems awkward enough there to interrupt the flow of the piece.
Re: Iterated Fuck by nentwined	4-Jul-03/10:06 PM
Not tonight, nentwined. I have a headache.
Re: Independence Day (the speech from the film) by scitz	5-Jul-03/11:06 PM
While I don't necessarily object to adaptation (some of the finest poems have been birthed in such a fashion), there ought to be some effort put into the finished product. I see little evidence of such. No enjambment, no typographical changes. For all I know, you could have very well copy-and-pasted this from a web page. What's the difference between this and plagiarizing Shakespeare, Milton, Ginsberg, or Atwood?
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Jul-03/11:12 PM
While I have some semblance of the context, it doesn't colour the fact that I think the pithiness and tone of the work, as well as the rhyming quatrain in the second stanza, are delightful and giddy in its haughtiness. I particularly enjoy the use of breaking the sentence between the two stanzas. Certainly an enjoyable piece with or without knowledge of the context.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Jul-03/6:44 PM
The diction is well-balanced, and the flow is pleasing. A well-crafted piece. I'd say that it would be nice to see it lengthened, but I get the distinct impression that if you were to do so, you may run the risk of losing what it currently has. (Not to say that you aren't capable; it's just that the thing seems so very delicate in its current state.) Upon reading this piece, I wonder why there isn't a 'prose' classification. 'Other' works, yes, but wouldn't it be nice to have 'prose'? Wouldn't it?
Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT	11-Jun-04/10:50 AM
Gorgeous the way it is right now. Don't change a thing.
Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	11-Jun-04/10:54 AM
Lyrically, I have no problem. The language is tightly-wound and it sounds good. The issue I take, though, is more typographical in nature. The enjambment of the lines and that punctuation aren't doing anything for me, and I find it a little distracting to the point where it's detracting from my enjoyment of the piece.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jun-04/9:30 AM
Behold, the long-distance bus ride. I tried one of them once. Vancouver to San Francisco. Never again.
Re: While flipping over stones by <{Baba^Yaga}>	26-Jun-04/9:38 AM
I get the impression that this could be a far better piece without the constraints of the rhyme pattern. As it is, it feels a little disjointed and forced in parts, if only to fit the structure you've imposed on it.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Jul-05/9:08 PM
It's as though you've been watching me eating pistachios late at night, weeping for the ones I can't open.