Killbirds

Member since 2002 · Posted 1 Jul 2003 · 4 comments

God bless you Killbird Another diver down Your feathers shan't be captured Your beak slant's absurd In that wedding gown God bless you Killbird I see you've been Aaron Burred With a splendid frown Your feathers can't be captured Birds of prey sure shoot a turd But why it's white, not brown? God bless you Killbird Jap goth piss & powder slightly stirr'd Better get out of town Your feathers might be captured Rules of hunting can get blurred Click of verb recoiling into noun God bless you Killbird Your feathers will be all captured.

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4 comments

[9] SupremeDreamer 1-Jul-03/9:43 PM Reply

interesting. i like it. ;D blessed with 9.

[7] david 4-Jul-03/1:38 PM Reply

I'm inclined to give a higher rating, if only because vilanelles are so difficult to write well. You've taken to the structure, and the narrative flow of the piece is intriguing.

[9] suprembeaner 13-Sep-03/4:09 PM Reply

you shold called it
kill terd,
and add poo'.
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[n/a] horus8 10-Dec-03/5:06 PM Reply

You are a poopy bear.