poemranker ::2838 Denise Dr. Troy, Mi. by Bachus

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2838 Denise Dr. Troy, Mi.

by Bachus

Member since 2002 · Posted 6 Jul 2003 · 10 comments

Goulash & knitted blankets A basement that went on forever Lilac bush big as a shed & in full bloom God, the smells. My Uncle Bruce's Siberian Husky 'Jenna' lived all year out back. The most beautiful dog ever. Loneliest chrystal blue eyes I've ever seen. The squirrels would piss her off staying just out of reach, but then, with no warning, my uncle would go out there with a 22 rifle and a hot dog still hangin out of his mouth and, CRACK! CRACK! Silence smoke wisp ... thud slight bounce & twitch Then the dog would be on it As he slid shut the screen door.

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[7] DreamerSupreme 6-Jul-03/2:41 PM Reply
Well, things were great untill the dogs death lol.. 7.
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer › DreamerSupreme 6-Jul-03/2:44 PM Reply
He shot the squirrel not the dog.
[n/a] Bachus › OneFingerAnswer 6-Jul-03/2:47 PM Reply
Ah, yo're quick today.
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer › Bachus 6-Jul-03/2:48 PM Reply
No. Just timely. :)
[n/a] Bachus › DreamerSupreme 6-Jul-03/2:46 PM Reply
The squirrel died my friend, the dog was on it's carcass chewing. Revenge for hours of torment. Read between the lines. The dog can't be on something if it's dead, now can it?
[7] DreamerSupreme › Bachus 6-Jul-03/2:56 PM Reply
ah.. damn me eyes to hell.. i need better glasses.. this sucks, im 17 and i got the eyesight of a 70 year old. yeah, i notice that specific line of details. ok, well dead squirrells.. cmon man they are cute lil mammals.. ah well. i feel stupid ;/
[10] horus8 6-Jul-03/5:54 PM Reply
I love making myself laugh.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer › horus8 7-Jul-03/11:39 PM Reply
yeah, me too.. like how my confusion makes me laugh at myself. heh.
[0] smlink84 8-Jul-03/8:45 PM Reply
You know I use to have a cat and she was very cute, but two days later, after she scratched me, I gave her to the animal shelter. Also I had a pretzel and I didn't care for it much. Oh yeah, I almost forgot, I live in America and also work in America. I would be happy to have a cow ass your mother.
Fairwell
[0] smlink84 › smlink84 8-Jul-03/8:48 PM Reply
It's supposed to be "AS" your mother, but now that I think about it, It would be funny to see something like that. I hope your mother is Ok.