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I am talented & good looking damnit! (Free verse) by <{Baba^Yaga}> Hi, I am talented and
good looking damnit
like an alter boy dashing
nude across a lawn on Staton Island
Hi, I am talented and
good looking damnit
more than an exploding cake
that says "Happy anniversary Slut"!
Then gives you a red bike,
and a summer pass to Magic Mt.
Hi, I am talented and
good looking damnit
In case you haven't heard
I'm not one for one ply paper
My hole serves the mighty word.
LIKE:
Poleposition
Pitfall
Kaboom
Frogger
Digdug
Centipede
Space Invaders
Missile command
Asteroids.
Page schools
Religion
Chores
Reunions
Sunday School
Mowing the lawn
Capture the flag
Ditch 'em
Kissing.
Hi, I am talented and
good looking damnit
Sometimes I think back to
the day I decided to be,
"Hi, I am talented and
good looking damnit"
and I wish I would have opted
for "Hi, I am a talented and
good looking serial killer,
damnit, get in and buckle up".
Up the ladder:
Quisling & white wine
Down the ladder:
My own Truism
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Posted: July 4, 2003 12:00 PM PDT; Last modified: July 4, 2003 1:03 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.75 Overall Rank: 1809 Comments:
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david @ 66.183.25.241
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4-Jul-03/1:28 PM
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The repetition in this piece is delightful and well-crafted. There are certainly many cases of repetition ruining a poem, but this certainly isn't one of them.
I saw an amazing movie last night.: "Frida". Ah, Salma baby, I don't know wether to salute or cry. Or both.
Hey do you ever stop writing? Didn't think so. Is okay if I tape this to my bathroom mirror and repeat it to myself every morning?
Hey! How are you? I put a killer version of Angels & dinosaurs up at mp3.com. Let me know if you like it. I played all instruments, composed and produced it. I'm anxious for feed back.
Yeah Frida was a good movie, really good. "Talk to her" is the best though, or "Celebration" and the "Character". Two Danish flick I believe from about four years ago.
Great stuff, man. That's about the extent of my music criticism abilities.
I played bass guitar in a band in high school. The band had one gig, then broke up. They all wanted to play crappy cover tunes. Thanks for the movie recommendations. Doubt my local video store carries them, but ya never know. So, hows "sharkmouth" coming? Heh.
It's coming, your video store will have them "celebration" and "character" have you seen "dancer in the dark"?
I thought it was spelled dammit. You learn something new every day. Nice refrain there in the middle.
It is.
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