Re: Ashes to Ashes by Irischer Junge	1-Sep-03/6:36 PM
The Waiting Room (Free Verse) by -=Dark_Angel=- Hello evil muslim Come in and take a seat Enjoy a cup of coffee Relax; put up your feet I'll just bring up your file To see if thou art just; You don't believe in Jesus!? But the Bible says you must! You shan't be going to Heaven Instead you'll rot in Hell As a vile non-believer We'll break your wicked spell! You'll never taste the splendour Of a Pure and Perfect Place Instead you'll watch your entrails Landing splat upon your face You won't be very happy When we jump on your best friend Or make you drive that scooter Down a road that has no end We'll open up your diary And insert a scrambled egg Then we'll make you give a sermon With it trickling down your leg And just in from Head Office Our request has been approved! To have your nostrils fisted And your bollocks both removed I hope you'll learn your lesson As well as have a lovely stay Then maybe next time you will listen To what the Bible has to say.
Re: Broken by Irischer Junge	1-Sep-03/4:58 PM
It certainly is an ace poeme. I really like the use of "dying" to rhyme with "crying"! But hey I have a question about Christ. If lots of people pray for something, is Jesu more likely to answer the prayer than if only one person prays? Thanks!
Re: a comment on The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus	30-Aug-03/7:58 AM
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Re: a comment on The Mellifluous Sound of God: Musical Eden by Don-Quixote	28-Aug-03/5:41 PM
Your poetry is tediously verbose because you overuse the dictionary and, to make matters worse, you happen to be the pretentious sort so you end up choosing words like "mellifluous" and phrases like "souls theatre". Your idea of what constitutes poetical wonderment is pretty much anything containing obscure language fused with line breaks and frequent refrences to spirits, messiahs, edens, cherubs, greek gods, dreamscapes, marble statues, melancholy, the whispering wind, xanthous brick roads, phantoms, reflections and musings. You're absolutely right. But what you lack is the uncompromisingly austere upbringing that was my priveledge. I am adept in my application of such words and phrases as mellifluous, xanthous, ruminate, maleficence, opprobrium, and "that would be an ecumenical matter", because they are not strangers to my daily vocabulary. You, on the other hand, wield the dictionary in much the same way a disabled wields an AK47 - as a strange, heavy object thrust into your hands by people who should have known better.
Re: a comment on The Mellifluous Sound of God: Musical Eden by Don-Quixote	28-Aug-03/3:42 PM
Then why don't you write a little webpage on your own computer called don-quixotepoemranker which only you get to vote and comment on, rather than posting your self-indulgent twaddle on a PUBLIC POETRY FORUM?
Re: The Mellifluous Sound of God: Musical Eden by Don-Quixote	28-Aug-03/11:55 AM
Extraordinarily pretentious title, even by your dictionary-obsessed standards. Nevertheless, great use of "delivered via the ear to be absorbed by my brain" as a beautifully concise synonym for "hearing something". "exquisite melancholy of the supernatural" / 10
Re: a comment on Nightshades by Bachus	27-Aug-03/4:22 PM
in with anger, out with love
Re: My Show at the Whiskey a Go Go on the 26th of August 2003 by Jeremi B. Handrinos	27-Aug-03/1:56 PM
well?
Re: a comment on I'm not afraid to admit that I am attracted to Robe Lowe by RO-B-LOWE ME PLEASE	27-Aug-03/9:50 AM
http://www.fistoffun.net/book/53.htm http://www.fistoffun.net/book/54.htm
Re: a comment on Playa been caught in their games. (revised/new) by LuckyJoe	26-Aug-03/10:02 AM
From your WRITING, it is my judgement that YOU cannot write and are probably thick.
Re: My Show at the Whiskey a Go Go on the 26th of August 2003 by Jeremi B. Handrinos	26-Aug-03/3:42 AM
Do you really know Rufus Wainwright? I saw him once on "Later with Jools Holland" on BBC 2. Playing "Foolish Love". Quite good.
Re: a comment on Sagadahoc to Hudson by http://mulberryfairy	12-Aug-03/3:26 PM
Emotions are important, aren't they? If the youth of today had to have a single role model, to the exclusion of all others, who would you choose out of Mother Teresa, Rolf Harris, The Queen Mother, Mother Teresa II, or Mother Teresa with an assistant?
Re: play to win by peaceseeker	12-Aug-03/3:21 PM
A good effort but it doesn't rhyme very well. Keep working at it, though! You'll get there!
Re: a comment on Musings: Willow Sculpture by SupremeDreamer	11-Aug-03/7:07 AM
you should be. If you genuinely cannot see how forced and stupid your poeme sounds as a direct result of injudicious use of a dictionary, then there is no hope for you. You wanna hit the big leagues and play hardball with the cool-cats and hipsters like me, you gotta be sharp and classy like me. Learn the moves kid. Because ten years from now you'll thank me for it, and then you'll know it takes more than a cursory rumination upon the frozen image of opprobrium to make it in this business. Forget it kid - it's Chinatown.
Re: a comment on Musings: Willow Sculpture by SupremeDreamer	11-Aug-03/4:00 AM
No. That isn't "one of the points of poetry". Here is a poeme I like: http://www.poets.org/poems/poems.cfm?45442B7C000C07060171 And here is what your version would look like: http://agentprawne.illfuckinghostit.com/SupremeDreamer.htm Now do you see? And besides: what's all this guff about me correcting you all the time? As far as I recall, the only time I've done that was for your American Eden poeme, in which you had incorrectly used the word "its" ten times. I may have corrected the odd word elsewhere, but I'm hardly jumping on every syntactical error I find just to make me look smart. I already look smart. And judging by the way you write most of the time, it's obvious you don't really bother with things like spelling or grammar or the difference between "your" and "you're". You might just be ignorant, but you probably just can't be arsed. So I don't bother pointing it out. I only point out errors when I feel it undermimes the author's credibility and/or confidence. I do it because I'm good at it, and I'm genuinely interested in people. And because it makes me feel big.
Re: a comment on Musings: Willow Sculpture by SupremeDreamer	11-Aug-03/2:24 AM
so?
Re: a comment on Can you believe this piece of shit was #1? by horus8	10-Aug-03/2:02 PM
http://agentprawne.illfuckinghostit.com/bumwagon.html
Re: Musings: Willow Sculpture by SupremeDreamer	10-Aug-03/10:15 AM
Do you know what this poeme sounds like to me? It sounds like you thought about "weeping willows", and whenever you couldn't think of a word, or you could think of a word but wanted a better word meaning something similar, you looked in a dictionary or thesaurus to try and find the most sophisticated word you could, and then used that instead. The result is the slantiest pile of pretentious "you cause me to ruminate" verse I have ever seen. What a mess. Like Dante meets bosh in a crack lounge. I would urge anyone reading the words: ruminate, lachrymose, enshrouding, legion, decrepit or opprobrium, to picture the 17 year old SupremeDreamer earnestly leafing through the dictionary in search of said word, with an uncompromisingly learned expression on his bloated face. As far as I can see, if you are barely literate then your only chance to hit the big leagues as writer is to become a ballsy Y2K slam-street poete. Personally, I prefer a fusion of flash-dance with MC Hammer shit.
Re: a comment on My Fart Is Eternally Yours (Free Sniff) By Yo-Yo by DreamerSupreme	7-Aug-03/5:37 PM
This has to be one of the most sickening comments I have ever read on poemeranker. I have been trying for months to parody this sort of attitude in my comments. Alas my endless battles to obtain some kind of stupid "maturity award" I invented, combined with the hours spent prattling on about how special I think I am and how immature everyone else is, has left me hanging wistfully in the breeze like an old man's nappy. If indeed you are joking, then I feel I must congratulate you on your devastatingly accurate portrayal of a top-notch dullard. Unfortunately, you aren't joking. You're a total fucking moron. Anyone who prances around the place like a total arse, constantly bragging about having "been around the block", and smuggly felching out these bum-crushingly spasticated comments, with their "oh so telling" put-downs "casually" interspersed with vomit-inducing "you'll be ok" banter, as if you're some sort of amazing "been around the block" father-figure, but at the same time so desperately aloof that you sort of float around the place in a giant kleptomasturbatory entrepoid shaped like The Fonz, has to be one of the worst stains ever to have been defecated on this utter toilet of a website.
Re: Angel by mistaric	7-Aug-03/7:59 AM
sublimely beautiful -10-