Re: Existence by ThoughtfulSoul	6-Aug-02/10:51 PM
ThoughtfulSoul, can you not see the difference between a) being arrogant and b) saying something is shit? Have you ever said something was shit? Did it make your head go up your ass? If not, then realise that criticism does not equal childishness. If so, I suggest you make an appointment with your proctologist, Sir.
Re: Regrets, No More by writteninskin	6-Aug-02/10:39 PM
Who said there was anything wrong with it? It's just that glamourising it doesn't seem to be very useful or poetic. It's part of the failing of humans that sometimes they get into a state where they rely on one person for happiness, and while this may be an interesting subject to write poetry about, your poem seems to be simply saying that such a state exists, in a fairly obvious way. Moreover you seem to be glad that you are in this state, and while this gladness may be a fundamental feature of the state, and therefore necessarily included in any poem which is written from the viewpoint of someone in the state, all the gladness seems to add is an impression of surrender and weakness. All I'm saying is this: if I had written a poem about being in this state, I would have at least made some reference to the fact that it's an inherently displeasing state when one neutrally observes it - it seems clearly unpleasant to be reliant on someone else for happiness; since you didn't, I wonder what you're trying to achieve.
Re: Regrets, No More by writteninskin	6-Aug-02/8:57 PM
So...what are you saying? That you feel uncomfortable unless there's someone that you know approves of you? An exciting sentiment indeede, Sir.
Re: How I Wish by DevilTmptrss	6-Aug-02/8:53 PM
Allow me to summarize. Verse 1: I miss you. Verse 2: You're insecure. Verse 3: I have limited skill at empathy. Verse 4: Some pseudo-mystical bullcrap. Well that was certainly worthy of poetry.
Re: Unsaid by Revekka	6-Aug-02/8:51 PM
Luckily, I am not afflicted by any such silence. What a load of total BS. You're just imagining that there was any such tension because it makes your life more angsty.
Re: AIDS in a Glass by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	6-Aug-02/4:37 PM
Poetie. At 11:24 you were concerned that I might offend some unknown person whose family has been afflicted by the AIDS. By 11:26 someone in your own family had been afflicted with the AIDS. Now, either more than one person is using the 'Poetie' poemranker account, which is a crime so heinous you ought to be banned immediately, or you are simply talking bollocks. You felt that by pretending to have an AIDS sufferer in your family you could turn your mere conceited moral outrage into personal grief and sympathy. I presume you've already emailed the site owner to demand my permanent exclusion, on the grounds that at least seven of your close friends and family members have died of the AIDS in the last week, with two more due soon. Also, you will have contracted chronic diarrhoea and trapped wind, which will provide you more reasons to insincerely accuse of personal attacks. As for the poeme itself (which, along with Van, constitute my as yet unfinished 'AIDS in a(n) X' trilogy), I thought it raised some particularly thought-provoking points. For instance, you might like to consider, and write some preliminary notes on, the following essay questions: 1. Why did the poete choose a Van and a Glass? Compare and contrast these two AIDS-containing items. 2. Can AIDS really be contained in a glass? And if so, would this provide a method of infecting someone with AIDS without having it yourself? 3. Can AIDS be extracted anally? Would this provide a possible industry for many African countries?
Re: God's Rod (toilet drink poem) by horus8	6-Aug-02/1:38 PM
I can't tell if you were just stoned off your face when you wrote this, or if you spent ages writing it and filling it with ancient symbolism. Because it makes no fucking sense to me, and looks like the sort of stuff I write when I'm stoned. It's probably the former. forloner, boner, where's the dog?a
Re: My ode to "the artist" by Agemo-Z	6-Aug-02/4:39 AM
He only changed his name to escape the commercial ensnarement of his previous name by his record company. Just like I changed my name by Deed Poll to -=Dark_Angel=-. I may have to change it again though, now the FBI is on my trail. Thanks Poetie! Oh, and this poem isn't really an Ode, is it? It's a haiku.
Re: I Hate You by mytenderrage	5-Aug-02/7:58 PM
It's really "sad" the way so many people on this site resort to saying "-=Dark_Angel=-'s poetry is crap, therefore his criticisms stem solely from jealousy of your wonderful talent." Can't you see I'm NOT TRYING TO WRITE THE SAME SORT OF POETRY AS RAVEN18? Why would I be jealous of someone who didn't have anything I wanted? I criticise raven18's poetry because it's trying to be meaningful (or whatever), and it fails. Miserably. You may criticise my poetry, but you don't mention in what respect it is lacking. You just vaguely insinuate that it's substandard, in a smug, knowing sort of way. Which is what I would expect from most people, since the default reaction on reading a poeme about something that is "childish" or "insensitive" or "crude" is to tell themselves that it's awful, because their brains would explode if they abandoned for one moment their constant desperate attitude of trying to have the same opinions as everyone else. What standards, exactly, does -=Dark_Angel=-'s poetry not meet? (And don't say something obvious and crap like "maturity, for one. Sensitivity, for another". Those are bullshit standards.)
Re: Black liqourice & G-stringed orphans by horus8	5-Aug-02/1:19 PM
Thanks for letting me do the voice of Leon Spencer in Sniper.w
Re: Chicken by robert blake	5-Aug-02/9:11 AM
A good try!
Re: Black liqourice & G-stringed orphans by horus8	5-Aug-02/9:11 AM
A good try!
Re: You are the Rain by emilyowey	5-Aug-02/9:04 AM
A good try!
Re: #9 by mikejedw	5-Aug-02/8:57 AM
You had to throw 'spring' in there didn't you? Just couldn't resist it, I guess. Afterall, if you mention 'spring', loads of girls are bound to think 'Oh this Haiku is so beautiful'.
Re: Untitled by Tekara	5-Aug-02/8:38 AM
If someone uses a word like "Ah" or "Oh" in a Haiku it means only one thing: They're struggling to get the syllable count right. Not bad though. Perhaps I'll let you off with a stern warning. Or would you prefer six-of-the-best (trousers down) ?
Re: Why Work? by TheTiredTyrant	5-Aug-02/8:23 AM
Yeah! Filthy scab! I hate you! I HATE YOU!
Re: Existence by ThoughtfulSoul	5-Aug-02/8:11 AM
"To exists where you don't want to/Is like not existing at all" ... is it? No really. Think about it. Is it? Of course it fucking isn't. "But to exist where you want to and/not to be wanted/Is like not existing at all" ... Look. I could understand you writing complete nonsense if it was either humerous, poetic or won'drous in some other special way but this is just awful. It's not deep or wise. It's beak. You beak.
Re: Reality by ThoughtfulSoul	5-Aug-02/7:54 AM
Of course there is a God! His name is Jesu and the reason why your life is so crappy is that he's punishing you for being sinful and for being a Doubting-Thomas. I have a splendid life! I am wealthy and proud, e'ery night I dine excellently and I have many butlers. I am a Gentleman. You, Sir, are naughty!
Re: My ode to "the artist" by Agemo-Z	5-Aug-02/4:25 AM
Prince Arthas is a dweeb. He completely ruins the game. His only skill is thinking he is smooth. I'll show him smooth.
Re: The Kipps by lilli	5-Aug-02/12:18 AM
Diddly dee the hocus pocus to me, diddly do the hocus pocus to you.