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Existence (Free verse) by ThoughtfulSoul
Like Stars I fall into the background Like love I think I lost myself Like everything I've ever known it disappeared eventually To exists where you don't want to Is like not existing at all But to exist where you want to and not to be wanted Is like not existing at all

Up the ladder: Cunt
Down the ladder: Here

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Weighted score: 5.179294
Overall Rank: 4801
Posted: August 1, 2002 4:49 PM PDT; Last modified: August 5, 2002 5:44 AM PDT
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Comments:
[6] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 1-Aug-02/6:40 PM | Reply
You ever break open a fortune cookie, and just fall down laughing in irony over what you've just read. I'm not laughing, ironic don't you think
[10] ==Doylum @ 213.122.127.18 | 3-Aug-02/4:00 PM | Reply
Mother the boy keeps erasing my comments. Mother what shall I do.
Mother help me to be strong.
[n/a] ThoughtfulSoul @ | 4-Aug-02/4:19 PM | Reply
i only erase ur comments cause they do nothing but confuse me and hinder my abilities so please write something useful next time
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 217.39.46.136 | 5-Aug-02/8:11 AM | Reply
"To exists where you don't want to/Is like not existing at all" ... is it? No really. Think about it. Is it? Of course it fucking isn't. "But to exist where you want to and/not to be wanted/Is like not existing at all" ... Look. I could understand you writing complete nonsense if it was either humerous, poetic or won'drous in some other special way but this is just awful. It's not deep or wise. It's beak. You beak.
[n/a] Agemo-Z @ 142.166.108.204 | 5-Aug-02/11:11 AM | Reply
No, both those things are like existing. It's the existance known as AGONY, and it's quite common to some people. Are you so naive to think that all existence should be bright and rosy, or would you just rather not think about the starving children making your Nike shoes in China right now?
[n/a] ThoughtfulSoul @ | 5-Aug-02/4:43 PM | Reply
u try to be so smart, maybe just maybe if u spent that much thought on ur own poetry it would be a little better
[n/a] ThoughtfulSoul @ | 5-Aug-02/4:44 PM | Reply
tell me what u think first about the chinese kids who probably mad ur adidas
[n/a] ThoughtfulSoul @ | 6-Aug-02/11:05 AM | Reply
I wonder what the hell u kids go through to have so much anger the world is not
perfect and neither are u or me so please stuff something in that fucking big mouth of
urs and shut it
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 6-Aug-02/11:30 AM | Reply
well first you have to be kidnapped from your bed one night. then driven into the desert by mr. self control, your nice neighbor that gives you candy. then bound, sodomized, and burned alive while your parents are at home getting high and 'swinging'. What, not tenacious enough for you. how about practicing what your name implys and being a little more patient and open minded. venting, is how the dutch stay healthy. all bow to the 'flying dutchman'.i
[n/a] ThoughtfulSoul @ | 6-Aug-02/4:05 PM | Reply
i understand being patient but u guys act so fucking childish just once try getting ur heads out ur asses and being an understanding person
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 6-Aug-02/8:26 PM | Reply
i don't wear ad-idd-as. i walk bare-footed to hand select my papyrus and pull my quill from the arse of a spanish hill turkey. then. nude. i write to you a comment in five seconds..more moving than all of your combined work..for you..out of a love for writing. there is nothing wrong with the children. and fuck the chinese. cuz you meant taiwan. sweat shop children have nothing to do with fortune cookies..got that! "thoughtfulsoul" that's your metaphor of the day. use your pen to change the world, or fucking hand it to someone that can. Next! key word here is "thoughtful" not "thinkfool"a
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 | 6-Aug-02/10:51 PM | Reply
ThoughtfulSoul, can you not see the difference between a) being arrogant and b) saying something is shit? Have you ever said something was shit? Did it make your head go up your ass? If not, then realise that criticism does not equal childishness. If so, I suggest you make an appointment with your proctologist, Sir.
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