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Existence (Free verse) by ThoughtfulSoul

Like Stars I fall into the background Like love I think I lost myself Like everything I've ever known it disappeared eventually To exists where you don't want to Is like not existing at all But to exist where you want to and not to be wanted Is like not existing at all

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 5-Aug-02/8:11 AM
"To exists where you don't want to/Is like not existing at all" ... is it? No really. Think about it. Is it? Of course it fucking isn't. "But to exist where you want to and/not to be wanted/Is like not existing at all" ... Look. I could understand you writing complete nonsense if it was either humerous, poetic or won'drous in some other special way but this is just awful. It's not deep or wise. It's beak. You beak.




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