regarding some deleted poem...	11-May-02/3:20 PM
I like your use of the work 'flashlights'! Why not try added lyricism around stanza 2?
Re: A New Day (v2) by nentwined	11-May-02/3:20 PM
Great work!
regarding some deleted poem...	11-May-02/5:33 PM
Nice one! I like your use of brackets! Good use of 'faulty' to rhyme with 'salty'! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK I'M SURE YOU WILL BE A POPULAR POETE IN NO TIME
Re: Dammit by Cha no Onna	11-May-02/5:34 PM
Ha ha! That was sure funny at the end.
Re: Cour by Cha no Onna	12-May-02/7:25 AM
When you were young, maybe you could write poems. But you're a very old man now. I think you'd better have a lie down.
Re: High? Coo... by Modulo	12-May-02/8:44 AM
Ohhhh "Whispering winds"... how beautiful. I docked marks because it's a Haiku and they are easy peasy lemon squeasy. And they suck.
Re: How Strange by T. Becquerel	12-May-02/8:52 AM
Despite the awful "Typical emotional waterfall" line, you managed to save face with a wonderful ending.
Re: Sugar Love by onlyontuesdays	12-May-02/9:40 AM
"Too much" is not enough? "Too much" is precisely that quantity which is excessive. Apart from that splendid!
Re: Hammered Nail by drjhoss	12-May-02/12:33 PM
I think your ear infection is infecting our ears via the medium of carpentry poems. A haughty fellowe indeede! Keep it up!
Re: Tom and Jerry by WarrenGDawg	12-May-02/2:32 PM
FUNNY AND PROVOCATIVE
Re: pull by skaskowski	12-May-02/2:33 PM
Perhaps you pulled frality from a satisfactory!
Re: Midnight Delight (a sexual sequal) by crims0ngh0st	12-May-02/2:35 PM
I think you need to refer to night and moonlight more.
Re: (untitled) by Mystifying	13-May-02/1:46 AM
Thank you! I'm so glad that these sentiments have finally been expressed in verse, and in such a witty, flowing way! I hope you continue to have profound and meaningful experiences, and move us all with your poetic recitations of them!
Re: I like to run by T.Becquerel II	13-May-02/1:48 AM
Not particularly interesting, but better than most of the self-absorbed shit on this site.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/1:57 AM
Great idea to include line numbers, to help the academics studying your poem in years to come. The thesis would presumably be 'The Depths of Pretentious Shitstew Plumbed by Emotionally Retarded Students'
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/6:40 AM
Would have been better if you'd remembered the 'se' in 'one of God's great secretions'. Go away and die.
Re: stupid by mogwai	13-May-02/7:37 AM
Don't worry mate! You're never alone. Jesu is always with you. But he's invisible.
Re: Driftwood by malakin	13-May-02/10:57 AM
Well, it started badly, tailed off a little in the middle and the less said about the end the better. Apart from that I loved it!
Re: that boy by nessness	14-May-02/1:28 AM
If this was any more cheery and trite I would explode.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-May-02/1:59 AM
And there was me thinking I'd joined self-indulgent juvenilia ranker. responding to: ------------- HEY not everything here is self-indulgent juvenalia. Some of it is complaints about self-indulgent juvenalia. And for the record, some times I take time out to order potstickers.