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that boy (Free verse) by nessness that boy is my anthem
my loud music
my crazy dance.
who cares what
anyone else thinks!
I'm having so much fun
dancing
in the road
in the
rain
lungs filled with my
favorite radio song.
that boy smiles at me
and
joins me in the street
bare feet on the
sparkling pavement.
who cares if
we should be asleep!
I'm having so much fun...
that boy is my wild music
my shower song,
my insane tango.
and boy,
that boy can dance!
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:12 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:12 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0518117 Overall Rank: 6816 Comments:
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16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
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I really like this poem. It needs a little work , but good job. Much better than "Fear".
such a youthfull exhuberence!
If this was any more cheery and trite I would explode.
Lets try using the correct fingers the next time I try to write HUMOUROUS (UK)
Simplisticaand quite normal, but yet lovely and wholesome, and american. I hear Mellencamp singing "pink houses" already.
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