| Re: a comment on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta |
27-Feb-06/7:19 PM |
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Dovina, thanks for the insight. There's a lot to edit and correct in this piece. But since I've already posted it here, I'm just waiting for public opinion on how I should go about it. Your review helps.
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| Re: a comment on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta |
27-Feb-06/3:48 AM |
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Blue Magpie. Thanks! I'm not sure how close it is to being a prose poem. All the same I've tried.
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| Re: a comment on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta |
27-Feb-06/3:42 AM |
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Betty? Wow! I'm christened here? lol. By th way, who sang that song.... I forget now.
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| Re: Iron Sky by MacFrantic |
26-Feb-06/11:17 AM |
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I'd say you've quite a few pieces better than this. In my opinion, this ain't very impressive. I wish I could pin point.
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| Re: a comment on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta |
26-Feb-06/11:12 AM |
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Just trying out a different style. Thanks for the review.
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| Re: Buried in the Booth (edit) by drnick |
26-Feb-06/10:37 AM |
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I'd say that this was a good write. Sometimes a writer finds it hard to put into word what he has in mind, but I think you did a pretty good job at this. Like Dovina said, a bit of less description would make it better. Good work!
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| Re: a comment on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta |
26-Feb-06/10:25 AM |
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Sorry! Line 12 is supposed to read 'dressed like any other guy'.
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| Re: a comment on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta |
26-Feb-06/10:19 AM |
Thanks Al. (Your name sounds better this way. It's sounds too hard (harsh) when in full.)....
I know what you are getting at. A lot of ideas came to mind when I wrote it, but then, should that stop me from writing what I originally meant to?
Atleast this might be some entertainment for a few, perhaps. So enjoy.
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| Re: The Dead Poet's Dream by drnick |
26-Feb-06/10:11 AM |
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| Re: An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta |
26-Feb-06/4:37 AM |
I have been trying a different style from my usual. It would be helpful to know what you feel about it.
I have had this in mind for a long time since Alchemy asked me to be more personal with the biblical characters I was writing about. Ref: some of my earliest poems.
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| Re: My Shattered Love by Silverjackel |
26-Feb-06/3:58 AM |
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Seeing how negative you are in the end justifies why she has to be worse than a typhoon or a cyclone or a twister, what ever you'd call it. I would have liked a more positive ending, you might have got an -8- from me then. Saying that you prayed for her good, rather, would have it going in your favour strongly.
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| Re: Gaia and Man by Blue Magpie |
25-Feb-06/3:05 AM |
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Too long for me at the moment.... will have to come back for it in a fresher frame of mind.
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| Re: A young Manâs Demise by Dovina |
15-Feb-06/9:35 PM |
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Who is the inspiration behind this poem?
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| Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta |
15-Feb-06/8:12 PM |
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Pray a little more, buddy, and then you won't be too weak to hold onto faith. Come on, be a man, you can do it!
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| Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta |
15-Feb-06/8:09 PM |
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Your a wise man Al, your a wise man!
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| Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta |
15-Feb-06/6:56 PM |
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He might not have God ..... but rather, God has him. He has you too Alchemy. Watch out.
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| Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta |
15-Feb-06/6:52 PM |
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| Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta |
15-Feb-06/6:49 PM |
Mr. heathen, what's this about undeniable bias? You are the one who's supposed to rate this poem and not the others. Now you do hurt my finest sentiments ( if ever there was any!) ha ha.... suit yourself...... I'll be on the look out for your piece.
and yes, it was His 'plan' for you to get reall drunk, if you may say so.
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| Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta |
15-Feb-06/10:07 AM |
Thank you Dovina. I take this as an honour. Your normal vote on my pages is a -7-.
As for the stronger stuff, this is basically how I pray. Besides, I can't cure myself of some habits, how am I gonna cure someone else's. And 'curing' ain't my fancy. Being adventurous is mine.
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| Re: Valentine 2 by zodiac |
15-Feb-06/7:09 AM |
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Quite different from my usual preference,.... but I like it. Are these news clippings from some real event. I ain't much of a news person, must admit that.
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