Re: a comment on To drnick by amanda_dcosta	15-Feb-06/6:57 AM
I'm glad you noticed that, Ranger. I think so too. Thanks for your look up on this poem.
Re: Lost In Her Effervescence by ALChemy	15-Feb-06/6:55 AM
Hmm not bad. I like the phrases 'soft waters', 'cold boiling ocean', 'blissful abyss', 'die as the suds die'. Things like this make up your poem. About critiquing it, looks like other's have already done so about what came to mind. She's a lucky girl to have someone still dedicate a valentine special to her.
Re: To drnick by amanda_dcosta	15-Feb-06/6:40 AM
For those of you who wonder why such a poem is ever written...... check out my previous poem. drnick... you're now famous.
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	14-Feb-06/6:39 PM
Al, I ain't Latin. but when a guy place himself in such a well set scene any girl would turn Latin. thanks a lot for reading my poem. I agree with zodiac's format, but still have a few doubts regarding it...which I am trying to figure out. I'm not familiar with the non rhyming pattern and probably that's what gets me confused with what I write. I noticed that even this piece has a bit of rhyming style to it. Unconsciously it sets in.
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	14-Feb-06/6:32 PM
drnick.....:-), Thankyou for appreciating my poem. I don't expect many to relate to my poem, you included. and I don't expect you also to change your mind. Stay that way... God loves you for who you are and not what I want you to be. I'm serious about writing that poem. It's just that I'm blank about how to start. I'm praying for a good theme......and the words to flow with it. you pray too, to help me out, and that way we would get a beautiful poem. Sorry, the theme's you, right? Now for the matter! Start praying ol' pal!
Re: The Struggling Poet's Lament by Ranger	14-Feb-06/10:48 AM
Ranger, I've just stumbled upon your poem, more like... I looked for your latest poem. It's good, but I will comment on it more tomorrow hopefully. It's pretty late... I could do with some beauty sleep. Nighto...
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	14-Feb-06/10:40 AM
Ranger, I respect others' opinions and beliefs ( ie. I don't object to it), but I don't necessarily believe theirs. All the same, as long as I don't let myself be influenced by everyword or comment or judgement that whirls around me...i'm doing great. Besides, I noted that he liked my poem and was grateful that he read it.
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	14-Feb-06/10:31 AM
Tell me Al, you're getting worked up about this... aren't you. I meant no harm, but I won't apologize. You were fresh bait after you claimed your title...... nothing personal to that. It's just that you followed up on every remark very well. I was quite amused with your opening statement. Now cool down and tell me, like a good boy, what you think of my poem. I could use some positive insight from you.
Re: Happy 40th Anniversary by Dovina	14-Feb-06/10:24 AM
Isn't it good to say we've come a long way...... that just about sums up the theme of the poem, I think. it's a nice write and to make it better, I'd skip mentioning the 'forty'. It's understood from the title. Just my opinion..... it could be either way according to preference.
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	14-Feb-06/9:59 AM
Birds of a feather flock together!
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	13-Feb-06/9:53 PM
Try your luck buddy boy! If two shrinks were to sign for you, you'd be in for a minimum of 60 days. I'll tell you a joke (If it turns out right) One day the President of the U.S. visited an asyllum. there he met a man in the garden (of the enclosed area), and he told him, "Why aren't you saluting me? I am a man to be taken note of. Don't you know me? I am the President of this country". And to this came the reply - "Don't worry. You'll be okay. When I came here, I used to say the same thing. After a few ECT's I'm alright."
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	13-Feb-06/9:11 PM
Al, I think I aught to warn you that we have patients here in the assylum being treated with the same plea. Just warning you of your fate!
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	13-Feb-06/8:56 PM
drnick, I believe you have a the right to freedom of religion and thought... so I will not override your opinions. however, as long as you're here on earth, remember that God loves you the way you are. Dislike my poem if you must, your free to do so, but you do put up a challenge for me. I might be tempted to write an overly religious poem dedicated to you, you being the inspiration behind that one. Either way, it's good to know you still read my poems. Thankyou.
Re: The Acorn Daisies by MacFrantic	13-Feb-06/10:40 AM
Mc.Frantic, this is pretty good. But, I would also rather prefer a definite rhythm. Would enhance the beauty of what you've pictured.
Re: Valentine by zodiac	13-Feb-06/10:11 AM
Zodiac, truthfully, I didn't connect well with the poem......it's not a topic that has picked my interest.
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	13-Feb-06/9:52 AM
Thanks a ton for your review "jesus". Looks like you have been doing a study on circumcision. Keep up the good work.
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	13-Feb-06/9:37 AM
Yeah zodiac, I think that sounds better. when one has a lot of ideas, nothing seems to fit in well, rather a confused state. Seems clearer now. Thanks for the review. Well appreciated.
Re: A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	12-Feb-06/11:06 AM
This is a real life experience, and I have been finding it difficult to explain it poetically. I have made an effort to convey this fantastic incident, and am sorry if it is a muddled piece. This incident took place on March 6th 2003 and I don’t think I will ever forget the effect of prayer and doubt our calling to prayer either.
Re: Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina	9-Feb-06/10:10 PM
Dovina, I think I have read this earlier. I might not have appreciated this much...more because I am not familiar with the American setting. but now it makes more sense to me. It is written from the heart and gives a sense of wanting it back. I think I owe you a 10 for this.... and I'm glad I didn't vote earlier.
Re: The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy	9-Feb-06/9:37 PM
Alchemy, I didn't quite fit in with the first verse. It was rather deceptive. I thought you were praying to God your Father, and that's when I got into the second verse. It go me off balance suddenly or rather off guard. It's written well though, if it's to your parents.