Re: Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	9-Feb-06/9:14 PM
Hi wilco, I haven't seen you around much. Probably it's because I too have't been so possessed by this site lately. This is a good piece, and if you say it's country then it definitely fits. I can't imagine putting rock or reggae into it as I have a strong aversion for the two. You definitely have a knack for writing lyrics. Hats off to you.
Re: My Father’s World by Dovina	8-Feb-06/7:55 PM
Am I the first for this? It very good. You have some good stuff in you.
Re: a comment on Sonnet by zodiac	7-Feb-06/8:31 PM
Alchemy, I don't see your vote here. How do I know what your grading for this poem is?
Re: a comment on Sonnet by zodiac	7-Feb-06/8:23 PM
Yeah guys! (grins). I'm all ears...or in this case, all eyes. It's been years since I actually paid and attention to good poetry, and at times I find it difficult to follow good poetical styles. It seems so simple when I read it, but getting my own in writing is another question. When I see something different from the normal pattern, I am always tempted to question and delve deeper. Excuse the doubts and lack of trust in what you've written, zodiac.... You'll see, given time, I'll be able to appreciate something unique about your poem, different from what one might usually see. I hope your not disappointed.
Re: a comment on Sonnet by zodiac	7-Feb-06/1:40 AM
Your sonnet is good from matter point of view, but I am still not convinced about the structure. I've been reading a couple of sonnets and this is a bit different (again, I might be wrong). I'll give you an 8, and if I am more satisfied I'll vote better, if allowed. Sorry for the doubts. Sonnets are a new subject for me to catch up on.
Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina	7-Feb-06/1:31 AM
Dovina, I am at a loss as to why there are two votes on my IP add. It could be because I'm using a proxy server. Other than that what could it be, cause I voted an 8 and am clueless about the 4. If you do know why, fill me in. It's not from my side anyway.
Re: Sonnet by zodiac	6-Feb-06/12:37 PM
I think I need explanation. I thought a sonnet had a distinctive rhyme pattern. (14 lines). That I see here. But the alternate rhyming between lines 1-12 is not clear. If I'm wrong about my idea ofa sonnet, please correct me. I find it rather confusing to understand a good sonnet, as I see different style wherever I check it out. This seeems to be a good piece from the vtes that I see, nevertheless, I want to make sure of what I'm voting. Till then...
Re: An Understanding Woman by Dovina	6-Feb-06/12:28 PM
It's good. I liked it. By the way... congrats. You hit a double century! This is your 200th post on poemranker. Keep up the good work!
Re: a comment on I'm there by amanda_dcosta	5-Feb-06/7:51 PM
How would I know that others haven't borrowed lines?
Re: a waste of time by hendrimike	4-Feb-06/10:40 AM
This sounded more like lyrics to me. And anyway, how old are you now.... that you're already contemplating on your life. a waste of time is an apt topic for you theme. I personally feel you should have given it more thought on the presentation. Not enough drunken language in it. Only description of where. Set the scene a bit cause the entire theme is a 'binge'.
Re: Coney Island Fall by ecargo	4-Feb-06/10:31 AM
I don't get it. Is this some kind of a roller-coaster ride called a cyclone or something like a giant ferrous wheel? Am I hot. Fill me in.
Re: a comment on I'm there by amanda_dcosta	4-Feb-06/10:20 AM
Alchemy, as you know, the first line is stolen (I mean borrowed).And the truth is the first line of the third verse too is borrowed. I logged into a poet's help site, and there was this random pick for opening lines. I picked a couple of them and made it the structure for my poem. I also did a dive into meanings and phrases today after you adviced me to look up alternate meanings and what it might suggest. It helped, thanks. And I found out that silence induces a sense of creepiness, or that something creeps in the dark and silence. Why not turn it into something positive esp. when referred to being in a nursery ( a place where children / plants / saplings are nutured. So I thought over it and decided that graces indeed creeps up when we are 'Still' and nutured in the presence of the Lord. do I justify myself for what I wrote? I did give it a lot off thought and study. Alchemy, you were a big help. Thank you. By the way, the rest of the stuff is totally mine.
Re: a comment on I'm there by amanda_dcosta	4-Feb-06/10:07 AM
Dovina.....kindly don't mistake this for Psalm 23. This psalm was the inspiration behind what i wrote. This beautiful psalm is an expression of david's trust in the Lord; I agree, I will never be able to write as beautifully as he did, but this poem that I wrote was an outpouring of my soul to the Lord..... it made ME feel beautiful inside.... and that's one of the reason's it's titled 'I'm there'.
Re: a comment on I'm there by amanda_dcosta	4-Feb-06/5:10 AM
Maybe it should be something related to Psalm 23, . This was the inspiration behind the poem. 'I'm there' is more like this being the dream scene, and I'm part of it. Thanks Paul for the review.
Re: Taste Ghazni by eliastemplar	3-Feb-06/8:26 PM
I don't know anything about Afghan style, this tells quite a bit.........or it is probably of just one area, like Calcutta being refered as India, though just a tiny part of India.
Re: a comment on Nomads by amanda_dcosta	3-Feb-06/12:50 PM
In the kettle of tenderness the rain sweeps...... Its just an opening line for a poem. it's not in any poem. i'm merely taking it for mine. I've got something like this when I first read it. wasn't sure it it made any sense.... In the kettle of tenderness the rain sweeps God's Spirit flows and blessings heap One's heart now knows no sorrow. was thinking about this... and was tempted to open shut eye. good night and sweet dreams to you too..... I mean, after 10 hours?
Re: a comment on Nomads by amanda_dcosta	3-Feb-06/12:34 PM
The tree of life or the ones zodiac posted above your comment? Those can't be yours, he said they weren't up to the mark. Good night. I'm off to bed. It's 2:00 a.m. now. thank God it's saturday tomorrow.
Re: Nomads by amanda_dcosta	3-Feb-06/12:18 PM
Zodiac...As you can see, I have been trying my best to understand haikus and yes, thanks a lot for your FINALLY frank remark ( or is there more to it?)...ha ha. No offence! I agree, I have to improve on my quality, but aren't I getting somewhere. Besides I've come across a phrase "In the kettle of tenderness the rain sweeps".... what could it most likely mean or imply. I've got quite a few ideas in my head, but I think I would go for a second opinion. Still no chance of chat?
Re: Whales in Gastineau Channel by zodiac	3-Feb-06/12:05 PM
I loved this. Makes me nostalgic. where I come from, we had to travel by boat to go to Girls High - to the mainland. And on the way we'd see the porpoises jump gracefully. It was a beautiful sight. By the way, whats a Nikon. don't know that. as for anoraks, isn't it some kind of a thick jacket? good going zodiac.
Re: a comment on A Walk in the Park by Dovina	3-Feb-06/11:52 AM
Blushing, aren't you?