| Re: Losing To Anatomy by Blindpoetry |
5-Mar-05/8:32 AM |
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very interesting, i like the images and the melody of it, but im not quite sure im understanding the full meaning
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| Re: Do I Know U? by DaRkMoOnLuVeR |
5-Mar-05/8:36 AM |
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im not a very big fan of rhyming, and this does sound rather forced to me - 5-
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| Re: You Fell Asleep First by jessicazee |
5-Mar-05/8:47 AM |
ooh i love this
im not sure if you were trying to convey an "inner" meaning, or if you were just giving an illustrative piece but either way i think its excellent - 10 -
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| Re: His Light by DevilBuni |
5-Mar-05/8:49 AM |
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ah, id say this is just a tab bit cliched, and the rhyming is stale and seems forced, you also spelled souless wrong i believe...the idea you are trying to convey are nice but I think you need to liven it up a bit......- 5 -
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| Re: Of Pride and Climate by MacFrantic |
6-Mar-05/5:55 PM |
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| Re: White Lie by ErgoErgun |
6-Mar-05/5:59 PM |
i hope that the point of this simply went over my head and that it isnt as bad as i think it is
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| Re: Oh! To be pressed against your windowpane by skaskowski |
6-Mar-05/6:00 PM |
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6-Mar-05/6:03 PM |
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| Re: What am I doing? by INTRANSIT |
7-Mar-05/3:41 PM |
this was interesting - and if flowed nicely - 8 -
-lia
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| Re: trapoide by Angel_of_fait |
7-Mar-05/3:41 PM |
this i don't feel was all that good
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-lia
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| Re: The Ode of Human Life by ShaNoN+960317485 |
7-Mar-05/3:44 PM |
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| Re: Retirement by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
8-Mar-05/11:52 AM |
this appears to be a bunch of rambling nonsense - 3 -
-lia
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| Re: untitled (suggestions wanted) by Don-Quixote |
9-Mar-05/3:58 PM |
i really like this..........
-lia
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| Re: My days work by lucky_cmc |
9-Mar-05/4:00 PM |
um, this was not, to be frank, very good
a) we all have a days work to do, and you weren't really compelling enough to make me think yours was special
2)it was rather bland and run of the mill
-lia
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| Re: oops by jay_dace |
9-Mar-05/4:01 PM |
nice but it would be that much stronger if you took off the "i think" tell us, don't speculate!
without that it would be a 5
with that change more of a 9
ill meet you in the middle and give you a 7
-lia
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