Re: Almost Persuaded by Dovina	12-Jul-05/12:19 AM
I am curious- what is the knowledge we are drooling for? Apart from this, The poem reminds me a bit of a scene from charlie and the chocolate factory, i believe its the scene on the boat. lucky for you, i like that movie, so ill give it a 5.
Re: Pandemic’s Here Again by Lenore	12-Jul-05/12:10 AM
WHO knows is a clever line. 6
Re: Butterfly Plague by zodiac	23-Apr-05/5:40 PM
i like the imagery of moth wings beating against a window.
Re: a comment on the solitary tree by bamf909	23-Apr-05/5:35 PM
actually, the purple is an instance of somehtingt intentionally left out- purple mountain's majesty is the next line of the song alluded to and should be inferred by the reader.
Re: a comment on the solitary tree by bamf909	22-Apr-05/12:30 PM
ok, i will explain the poem. the solitary tree is the individual who stands alone for what he or she believes in while the government has worked to strike fear into the hearts of the general populace, hence "stands firm." the wheat (amber waves of grain) represents the rest of the american people, who have succumbed to their cowardice and are now yellow (as opposed to amber)and also contrast with purple (purple mountains' majesty)implying a lack of majesty. "waving in the wind" is in contrast with the firm resolve shown by the tree, meaning that the people allow themselves to be thrown to and fro acording to whatever events are currently transpiring. the next stanza describes a political "storm," relevant because of today's political turmoil. "sudden storms" can be interpreted as recent global events (I had 9/11 and the war in iraq in mind). the "crackling calm" is (to me at least), the period of tension between 9/11 and when the government took action. "thunder shakes and showers render/ heaven's lightning a fiery flare" evokes images of war and bombing (think back to the "shock and awe" campaign). cinders and sparks are the aftermath of the war, smaller and smaller bits of violence. the tree (individual) has been struck down, the casualty (not literally) of the war, his or her views have been tossed aside, destroyed. Still, the dignity that individual retains allows it to stand taller than the wheat (the rest of society), demonstarting that even after suffering a devastating blow, the individual's honor is greater than if he or she had conformed like the wheat.
Re: Panda Love by Semper Phildelis	22-Apr-05/10:12 AM
this is kind of funny. i think "bang" is kind of harsh. i want to like the male panda, and that means he should be more sensitive to her needs. why odesnt he bring her a bouquet of bamboo shoots or something? (5)
Re: a comment on the solitary tree by bamf909	22-Apr-05/10:08 AM
i'm not sure i could leave that out. "amber waves of grain" is important to the poem's metaphor, and i actually think that the contrast between purple and yellow shows the contrast between the cowardice shown by many americans in not standing up for what they believe in, and the proud culture of courage that we have historically prided ourselves on. so that part has to stay, i think, but im certainly open to suggestions about shortening other parts, especially the middle stanza, which contains a lot of imagery that may or may not be necessary to understanding the concept of the poem.
Re: a comment on Forest Rain by bamf909	26-Feb-05/9:59 AM
Thanks for the link. That was quite an informative site.
Re: Acrostic Terza Rima by Bhaskaryya	25-Feb-05/10:34 PM
creative. not terribly meaningful, but the form has some limitations that I must take into account. 7 sounds about right.
Re: a comment on Forest Rain by bamf909	25-Feb-05/10:28 PM
Thanks- I really appreciate the encouragement. The most enjoyable part of haiku, for me at least, is the way it can capture meaning but retain its brevity. The last five syllables are always the hardest for me, but I do enjoy the challenge.
Re: Midnight Chimes by TLRufener	25-Feb-05/10:22 PM
This reminds me of "one two, buckle my shoe; three, four, shut the door...etc". Except I enjoy that poem. 2
Re: My Wish by Fire_is_cool	25-Feb-05/10:19 PM
You have out-cliched cliche. Well done. Sorry if that came across as being insensitive.
Re: Untitled by MacFrantic	25-Feb-05/10:12 PM
the feet are inconsistent. good effort, maybe just rework it a bit.
Re: a comment on So I Hear by Vince Dolamando	25-Feb-05/10:08 PM
wow, and I even missed the part in which you rhyme "hill" with "hill". this is truly a literary treasure.
Re: a comment on So I Hear by Vince Dolamando	25-Feb-05/10:06 PM
also,apparently I can't type "about" (oh wait, i just did). sorry.
Re: So I Hear by Vince Dolamando	25-Feb-05/10:04 PM
That poem was rather amusing. Especially the part abi=out the "RU-CUS". Funny enough for a 1.
Re: Get in Line by MacFrantic	20-Feb-05/1:25 PM
A bit vague, but i like the ending
Re: a comment on A Violent Autumn by bamf909	20-Feb-05/1:16 PM
yeah, actually, i didn't write the pirate stuff.
Re: Brother's Egg Book by Jeremi B. Handrinos	20-Feb-05/12:26 PM
I don't understand the second line, and scribbles/quibbles might be a bit forced, but I like this poem, especially "Piling things around Me, in squares, and Suspensions."