| Re: Award shows make my cock hard, but you don't by Bachus |
30-Aug-02/12:53 AM |
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A bit of fun,but is it Poetry?
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30-Aug-02/2:28 AM |
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A vivid picture.liked the style.8
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30-Aug-02/4:43 AM |
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the tone is earnest,for that 5
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| Re: "The title is overused!" by vulcan |
30-Aug-02/9:12 AM |
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| Re: spirit of a grama by livingcanvas |
31-Aug-02/1:06 AM |
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"Now only a few crumbs..."comes beautfully like a downfall.7
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| Re: Passion's Flashes by RaychelW |
31-Aug-02/1:08 AM |
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truly passionate.hope you success in later poems.7
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| Re: Terror Too Tranquil by RaychelW |
31-Aug-02/1:10 AM |
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you are a poet indeed or become a real one soon.8
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| Re: Mind Set Adrift by RaychelW |
31-Aug-02/1:41 AM |
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Beauty of the poem lies in the first stanza.the second one is not that original.yet it was beautiful.6
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| Re: Something in your eyes! by kawakurdi |
31-Aug-02/2:10 AM |
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| Re: Tunnel Vision by x311 |
31-Aug-02/8:17 AM |
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| Re: Tunnel Vision by x311 |
31-Aug-02/8:22 AM |
I read your "crying beside a lake"
your style has a moving force.my friends have gone too far.poem is in some parts confused,but never0!5.
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| Re: Tunnel Vision by x311 |
31-Aug-02/8:26 AM |
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Sorry x311!bother you too much.in your "Guide me"you are at your best.9
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31-Aug-02/8:36 AM |
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Cool down!for your violence 7
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| Re: Black Heart by brazen |
1-Sep-02/2:06 AM |
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the story is good,but it sounds as if you mean to reach the end of it as quickly as you can.(each sentence has the finality of a finale).I dare suggest you add some lines to your first stanza.something missing.wish you further success.(your angel is exceptional!)7
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| Re: Black Heart by brazen |
1-Sep-02/2:07 AM |
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the story is good,but it sounds as if you mean to reach the end of it as quickly as you can.(each sentence has the finality of a finale).I dare suggest you add some lines to your first stanza.something missing.wish you further success.(your angel is exceptional!)7
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1-Sep-02/2:11 AM |
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nice!The last stanza is the best.6
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1-Sep-02/7:57 AM |
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a memorable night for a poet.original metaphor that of hormones.
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| Re: I'll Be In My Bed, My Grave by longships |
1-Sep-02/8:02 AM |
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| Re: A journey to the sun by kawakurdi |
1-Sep-02/8:11 AM |
Memorable lines"cry without voice
Die without body"liked it7
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| Re: you're never alone by nentwined |
1-Sep-02/8:12 AM |
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