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Passion's Flashes (Free verse) by RaychelW
I first felt lightning at the age of five Watching the wind kick clouds across the sky. Flat on my back, half asleep in the grass and hypnotized by a sinister sky. The flick of fire brought fear too late, as a lick of lightning lit through my eyelids. Synapses sent screaming in electric epilepsy, jolting and jangling, my mind momentarily mangling, when darkness descended for a moment of madness. Then sudden silence and a relieving rain. Brain ablaze, mouth muted, The smell of smoke still in my nostrils, Eyes almost blind to the epiphany, for first lessons in love are seldom so pitch perfect. Passion comes in fleeting flashes. Love leaves us aflame.

Up the ladder: Louder
Down the ladder: Mi Virgin De Guadalupe

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.428571
Weighted score: 5.384202
Overall Rank: 3218
Posted: August 30, 2002 9:08 PM PDT; Last modified: August 30, 2002 9:08 PM PDT
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Comments:
[7] vulcan @ 80.242.3.212 | 31-Aug-02/1:08 AM | Reply
truly passionate.hope you success in later poems.7
[8] Ming T. Merciless @ 62.254.0.7 | 31-Aug-02/3:33 AM | Reply
Some spell binding imagery, I shall follow your work Rach.
[8] Ming T. Merciless @ 62.254.0.7 | 31-Aug-02/3:33 AM | Reply
Some spell binding imagery, I shall follow your work Rach.
[8] Ming T. Merciless @ 62.254.0.7 | 31-Aug-02/3:33 AM | Reply
Some spell binding imagery, I shall follow your work Rach.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 213.122.57.147 | 31-Aug-02/7:23 AM | Reply
Pfff. What a waste. You had a perfectly good poem about lightning, and you had to ruin it by turning it into a metaphor for love.
[n/a] god'swife @ 209.179.213.120 | 31-Aug-02/5:15 PM | Reply
I been seeing more and more good poetry on poemranker today. This is one of them. I it do better not to mention Love. Your talk of lightening alone is poetry enough.
[8] Corey McHattan @ 144.134.243.67 | 31-Aug-02/5:33 PM | Reply
Loved the first line.
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