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4-Sep-02/8:30 AM |
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Sorry for the narrow-minded comment!on rereading it I found the dreaful sadness which cries out of the first stanza and the whole work.once more though it will change nothing I'll add my vote.
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| Re: Violated by Ojiboch |
4-Sep-02/6:56 AM |
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The style fits the topic.liked it.
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| Re: Dreaming What Seems To Be by Tormentedsoul718 |
4-Sep-02/1:20 AM |
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I hope you never do that or else we'll miss your lively imagination.I liked and understand it.a proper beginning.(i think to/too much-put it ot/to).wish you success.8
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| Re: Love Turn by Tormentedsoul718 |
4-Sep-02/1:25 AM |
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I liked the end.A lover's spontaneity of pain is tempestuosly expressed.9
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| Re: Birthday Love by Tormentedsoul718 |
4-Sep-02/1:29 AM |
without -you-I suppose my summer...?
rework on this.repetitions of feelings could be expressed with variety of words and images.
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| Re: Someone by Tormentedsoul718 |
4-Sep-02/1:36 AM |
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"There's no frigate like a book!".It was rather confused.your use of Words are limited.Your feelings highly poetic yet to get something off your chest,they're good enough.So!6
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| Re: Walk With Me by Ojiboch |
4-Sep-02/7:00 AM |
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"the spontanous overflow of powerful feelings!".I liked it esp "a welcome from reality".In general highly original.
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| Re: oasis by itchiwitch |
4-Sep-02/7:29 AM |
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3-Sep-02/8:36 AM |
Thanks god's wife,I edited it.
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| Re: Do Swans Get Jealous? (#2) by Christof |
3-Sep-02/8:42 AM |
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It's one of your best."ebbs away with the shrug of one"memorable and impressive.
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3-Sep-02/7:44 AM |
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it was very beautiful in its simplicity of tone and feelings.last stanza charming.10
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| Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof |
3-Sep-02/7:49 AM |
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It was pure poetry.congratulations!Get them published and I'll be the first to buy!(you may have done it already.I'll be happy to know).Wish you success.
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| Re: She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof |
3-Sep-02/7:54 AM |
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Sorry again!"Until,like welded joints,they freeze"to the end is wonderful.Enrapturing!
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| Re: The Stifling Moment by vulcan |
3-Sep-02/7:56 AM |
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vulcan thanks you for readng it.
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4-Sep-02/7:02 AM |
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It has a longing tone.nice!7
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4-Sep-02/7:03 AM |
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| Re: Falling by <~> |
4-Sep-02/7:13 AM |
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a beautiful natural picture.One must be a Nature-hater to give you 1!7
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| Re: oasis by itchiwitch |
4-Sep-02/7:29 AM |
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4-Sep-02/8:25 AM |
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The 3rd stanza makes your poem wothy of a 9 and the last a lovely 10.beautiful!
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