on some deleted poem
4 Sep 2002, 8:30 AM
Sorry for the narrow-minded comment!on rereading it I found the dreaful sadness which cries out of the first stanza and the whole work.once more though it will change nothing I'll add my vote.
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 11:05 AM
A lovely zest!nice!
on Dreaming What Seems To Be by Tormentedsoul718
4 Sep 2002, 1:20 AM
I hope you never do that or else we'll miss your lively imagination.I liked and understand it.a proper beginning.(i think to/too much-put it ot/to).wish you success.8
on Love Turn by Tormentedsoul718
4 Sep 2002, 1:25 AM
I liked the end.A lover's spontaneity of pain is tempestuosly expressed.9
on Birthday Love by Tormentedsoul718
4 Sep 2002, 1:29 AM
without -you-I suppose my summer...?
rework on this.repetitions of feelings could be expressed with variety of words and images.
rework on this.repetitions of feelings could be expressed with variety of words and images.
on Someone by Tormentedsoul718
4 Sep 2002, 1:36 AM
"There's no frigate like a book!".It was rather confused.your use of Words are limited.Your feelings highly poetic yet to get something off your chest,they're good enough.So!6
on Walk With Me by Ojiboch
4 Sep 2002, 7:00 AM
"the spontanous overflow of powerful feelings!".I liked it esp "a welcome from reality".In general highly original.
on oasis by itchiwitch
4 Sep 2002, 7:29 AM
7.magical effect!
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 8:36 AM
Thanks god's wife,I edited it.
on Do Swans Get Jealous? (#2) by Christof
3 Sep 2002, 8:42 AM
It's one of your best."ebbs away with the shrug of one"memorable and impressive.
on some deleted poem
3 Sep 2002, 7:44 AM
it was very beautiful in its simplicity of tone and feelings.last stanza charming.10
on She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof
3 Sep 2002, 7:49 AM
It was pure poetry.congratulations!Get them published and I'll be the first to buy!(you may have done it already.I'll be happy to know).Wish you success.
on She Thinks Of Men Waiting by Christof
3 Sep 2002, 7:54 AM
Sorry again!"Until,like welded joints,they freeze"to the end is wonderful.Enrapturing!
on The Stifling Moment by vulcan
3 Sep 2002, 7:56 AM
vulcan thanks you for readng it.
on some deleted poem
4 Sep 2002, 7:02 AM
It has a longing tone.nice!7
on some deleted poem
4 Sep 2002, 7:03 AM
Interesting!6
on oasis by itchiwitch
4 Sep 2002, 7:29 AM
7.magical effect!
on some deleted poem
4 Sep 2002, 8:25 AM
The 3rd stanza makes your poem wothy of a 9 and the last a lovely 10.beautiful!