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Dreaming What Seems To Be (Other) by Tormentedsoul718
Lying awake,dreaming of what i had Thinking of what made me so sad Wanting to die and not be here Needing to cut,and just disappear So i grab the knife,put it ot my wrist Cut the vein and clinch my fist The blood drips out onto the sheets As I lie dying in my defeats My eyes stay open,looking ahead As the blood turns the sheets red My fist begins to open,i'm turning weak Try to cry out,but i can't speak My mind is gone,i thought wrong I was weak,when i thought i was strong I think to much and now i'm gone Falling asleep without a yawn I'm six feet under now,missing out I cry,but no one can hear me as i shout I buried myself,i'm young,16 years old Now i'm dead,underground,so cold I want to come up and be loved again I wish i could erase it,sow up the vein I miss you all,i want to come back Its to dark,everything here is black I miss it all,this all seems like a dream But things now,aren't what they seem

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6
Weighted score: 5.0715218
Overall Rank: 6517
Posted: September 4, 2002 1:00 AM PDT; Last modified: September 4, 2002 1:00 AM PDT
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[8] vulcan @ 80.242.3.101 | 4-Sep-02/1:20 AM | Reply
I hope you never do that or else we'll miss your lively imagination.I liked and understand it.a proper beginning.(i think to/too much-put it ot/to).wish you success.8
[10] sk8boardandpoems @ 24.167.109.182 | 1-Mar-03/12:19 PM | Reply
wow i cant imagine why anyone would give it an 8? they must of read it wrong...stupid blind idiots they are missing the point of this poem its so...full of ryming and thoughts and everything..YET ANOTHER 10
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