Re: The Fall of Marvin Hyde by cyan9	20-Nov-05/4:58 PM
Maybe the ficticious Herbert Cyan is more real than Marvyn Hyde. The parallel poem is not up so I can't say, only that what I used to see as the ficticious Dovina is becoming more real every day. She'll pop into life some day and stab a knife into _____.
Re: a comment on Random Sandwich, or, The Scavenger's Chocolate Wrapper by impert&ent	20-Nov-05/4:32 PM
You didn't use mine. I should give a zero.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/6:46 PM
Maybe I did not say it clearly enough. I ton't particularly enjoy trumping anyone. Spastics can be intelligent, and/or heartwarmingly integral, and might be able to fly a plane if it had voice controls. I thought we had covered that before. Trumping is not necessarily counter-intellectual. It can be arogant, but not always. It is not beneath me, I just don't usually enjoy it. I thought all this was clear. What is it you're saying again?
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/6:45 PM
Maybe I did not say it clearly enough. I ton't particularly enjoy trumping anyone. Spastics can be intelligent, and/or heartwarmingly integral, and might be able to fly a plane if it had voice controls. I thought we had covered that before. Trumping is not necessarily counter-intellectual. It can be arogant, but not always. It is not beneath me, I just don't usually enjoy it. I thought all this was clear. What is it you're saying again?
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/6:16 PM
I think you're missing some history here. You see, zodiac likes to trump; I really don't care to. The two proposed arguments here, if carried along past courses, would end with him trumping, by simply declaring himself the winner. I just didn't want to do that again, not that I don't enjoy his antics, but it's getting a bit much. Integrity is something a person does with the appearance of thoughtful conversation, wouldn't you say? For example I could ask you if a spastic should be allowed to fly a plane. If you say yes, citing the high mental abilities of some spastics, I could trump with the common usage of the word spastic to mean dimtard. On the other hand if you say no, then I could cite the abilities of spastics. In either case I would shine with integrity and you would look dumb.
Re: a comment on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina	19-Nov-05/4:41 PM
You've sent me scurrying around to see where I said you wrote something from LaLa Land. I did make a comment like that awhile back, but I don't see it on any of your poems. Did you delete a poem? Remind me and I'll look at it again. As a general comment, your poems and comments have been good. Thanks for commenting.
Re: Amber's Witness by cyan9	19-Nov-05/4:35 PM
A good take on leaves and cycles. Line 2 seems to have an "and" and a "the" too many. Track marks in bark might better be under cambium - just a suggestion.
Re: a comment on Math Poem 4 by Dovina	19-Nov-05/4:15 PM
I think "Submission" which runs along similar lines is better.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/3:55 PM
You didn't write this, did you?
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/3:49 PM
Is there any subject from which I am not disqualified due to one of your strongly held beliefs? Yes, I can describe some of your strongly held beliefs and how you came to believe them.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/3:44 PM
I would, in fact, argue with: "when you or I assume God, we almost always assume Christian God." But you and I know the direction that silly arguement would go. I could posit a good response, and say "Trump." But you know my position on trumping. I could do the same with "'There either is God, or there isn't' is a very Christian-God-minded thing to say." No point. I don't particularly believe in believing either. I particularly don't believe in assuming beliefs in others when they have not clearly stated or lived out those beliefs. A wise fish enticed to a pier-dangled hook will consider the source - Dovina
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/8:01 AM
Why assume some particular god and adhere, because of an assumption, to some book? There either is God, or there isn't. If God is, we cannot confine or even describe Him. You say you don't particularly believe in god, which is hedging in the agnostic direction, atheist perhaps, except for your prior denial of atheism. As you know, I think there is God. Much of the Bible points to God, and some of it might even be inspired by Him. But other parts are, by the authors' own admission, merely literature. A bridge incomplete traverses no river - Dovina
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	19-Nov-05/7:37 AM
I could describe a perfect woman better, but please allow him his fantasy.
Re: a comment on Bread and blackthorns by Caducus	19-Nov-05/7:25 AM
To say Caducus is Right-brained is to say that he leans toward the artistic side of his brain, favoring it over the logical side. It's not the same as catagorizing to the extent of prejudice. We use labels all the time, it's part of language.
Re: A daisy chain for Nina by Caducus	18-Nov-05/5:26 PM
If she married you in 82, why are you, as man, a widow in 83? Lesbians, or do you mean widower?
Re: soon i will travel by ay deee	18-Nov-05/5:19 PM
Good, except for the mundane last line.
Re: Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac	18-Nov-05/5:18 PM
I like the cousinship of man and devil, the take on the swine and Legion, mosquitoe/bug, Legion/prophet, and the waiting cross. The () seem distracting and could be done without I think.
Re: Gerry's Song by ALChemy	18-Nov-05/5:03 PM
I say this only because poemranker has corrupted me: "Sounds gay."
Re: a comment on Love letter by zodiac	18-Nov-05/5:00 PM
A jingle has rhythm, usually rhyme, and carries a simple theme. A love letter conveys affection. This carries: don't shake the baby???
Re: a comment on Love letter by zodiac	18-Nov-05/4:54 PM
Permit yourself to do such a dasterdly act only if you wish boycot. If you want to get rid of a scroungy poem because I made you feel bad about it, then please delete it. If you want to post a new poem, then post it. It's not like you post every two days and need to squeeze another in edgewise. Gees!