Re: Bury my memory by creepshow	27-Jul-06/3:10 PM
It Won’t Stay Buried Etched in my flesh, burned in my brain, tainted memory, the image of you. Haunting thoughts, one after another, you and you. When blurred vision comes clear, I shudder at the apparition, staring back, into me, into my soul. it won't let go. Never, Ever.
Re: Slipping Outside (for a minute) by drnick	26-Jul-06/8:30 PM
realizing some highness likely accompanied the writing of this, I'll go easy. "Falling with the devastation of a snowflake on the ocean." is a good line, but it's not a sentence, and I don't see how it ties in. And the "sentence" above it needs a comma or something, unless my highness equals yours.
Re: 08:12AM Hiroshima by Caducus	26-Jul-06/8:21 PM
I can’t get much into this. Not because it’s badly written, (it's not) only because I’ve heard versions of it so many times. Isn’t it the way of clichés – they were mostly clever once, til “time stood still” on their cleverness, yet another cliché.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	26-Jul-06/3:47 PM
You’ve read the scientific things, of light and math and such. But there’s something deep within that won’t be satisfied without boogaloo and popping, heartfelt moves to emotional tunes. Again, extend your hand, Angel; the dance floor’s smooth.
Re: a comment on Ode to the Irish Pub by mindsigns	26-Jul-06/11:32 AM
Someone so threatened by them he writes long diatribes with no basis beyond gut or feeling.
Re: Ode to the Irish Pub by mindsigns	25-Jul-06/12:44 PM
Ah, Kinsale, of Robinson Crusoe by Daniel Defoe, a hill town with narrow streets beside a harbor. It’s mostly pubs, restaurants and tourists today, but it was the last outpost for ships about to attempt the dangerous Atlantic crossings during the potato famine. And to sit there in a pub with tipper tipping against a bodran, singing Red-head Mary, Guinness in hand, yes, it makes the world go away. You’ve captured it well.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	25-Jul-06/12:22 PM
I see how the second verse could make a better beginning. Will consider that. I’d also like a waltz-like rhythm, even fox-trot, but doubt if I can do that. Thanks.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	25-Jul-06/12:21 PM
It would be nice to set a poem about dancing to music – something you could dance to. Hadn’t thought of that. The word “selfishness” may not be right; it’s a feeling of “everybody for themselves” that is so unlike my father’s attitude, and the thing I’ve come to miss. It’s so unlike dancing, where unless two people cooperate, you have chaos. I’ll search for a better word. Thanks for the ideas.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	25-Jul-06/9:28 AM
I know you love me and my words. It’s a frustration, yes, to be admired by such a wide cross section of the populace. However my affections turn naturally to men who are better at addition. You see, Dovina + Menopause, when that occurs, and it will, will only mean a reduced need for birth control, not an utter lack productive activity, as it surly is already in one so ancient and limp.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	25-Jul-06/9:12 AM
Yes, it’s located near the big toe of the right foot, a pointed pump, poised and ready. But thanks for considering that it might be a more tender part.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	25-Jul-06/9:06 AM
It all began with your severely contorted logic, reflected even after my many admonitions. For example, how could I have stopped loving you and turned to pain over being spurned, both at the same time? Have you even learned the basic skill of addition? Aside from the improbability of receiving love in your present sagging, slobbering condition, your utter lack of reason is appalling.
Re: a comment on A Time to Dance by Dovina	24-Jul-06/5:36 PM
Come on over and extend your left hand. I'll show you what I've got.
Re: Trash by drnick	24-Jul-06/2:44 PM
I love this kind of thing - colorful glimmers reflected from a pool of urine, for example. And the cadance is nice here, but with some glitches, at lest to my ear. Night lights shiver softly glimmer Upon a broken glass just a thought.
Re: Nothing Broken, Nothing Saved by somemorepoetry	24-Jul-06/1:04 PM
I hope everybody has at least one day in their life when they say to those gathered around them, as I have, “We are the living truth. History is unable to subjugate us and our inevitable victory of intellect.” Check the grammar, but I like the spirit of this.
Re: Suicide Dream by Ranger	24-Jul-06/12:40 PM
The haunting opening quote, written in third person, as if it were from a novel, and maybe it is. Then the peace lily, an ornamental indoor plant, which I suppose grows wild by some midnight pool. And finally, the uncertain, dreamy language conjures vague reflections, as a dream would, or maybe really did. I feel haunted by the scene, but can't put a finger on the specifics.
Re: Life Goes On by Edna Sweetlove	24-Jul-06/11:43 AM
In your usual condition of nincompoopery, I have to ask if you are worthy of attention, even enough attention to confer words like “doggerel.” Usually, you are so busy making mud pies in the slum that you cannot imagine a resort holiday by the sea. You are not selfish enough. You desire too little. But here perhaps you’ve caught a glimpse past the poop of nincompoopery, and I hope it grows.
Re: a comment on Contractual Paradox of the Old by Dovina	20-Jul-06/8:58 PM
I love flattery, even with an uncertain but.
Re: a comment on Contractual Paradox of the Old by Dovina	20-Jul-06/4:59 PM
I have seen neither the movie nor the diary of which you speak. As for the guy’s five year plan, it looked to me, as I was watching their eyes meet, that his intentions went way beyond that.
Re: Mind Over Madness by drnick	20-Jul-06/10:05 AM
It's great to sit around with a friend an get crazy, talk ceazy and laugh over a beer or a glass iof wine. I guess, having never done more, it seems unnecessary, but who am I to know. Not a bad description, I'd say.
Re: To Talitha by amanda_dcosta	20-Jul-06/9:58 AM
This starts off well, but I think the Ben Franklin quote falls short, especially with the irrelevant word, "wealthy." "Healthy" and "wise" are applicable though. Also "wonders" should be "wonder" I think, to match the subject "I." But the thing that causes me to want to argue is the implicatioin that a healthy and wise person is perhaps more held in His hands than the other.